The author presents a view that the remarks given by an expert are subject to importance rather than those of a layman. The claim is true in its terms to most of the times but depending on several factors concerned with the kind of field, the one making judgement, and the experience of an individual involved in the work, exceptions can be made.
Firstly, the amount of criticism is made keeping in head the ability and experience of the individual and the level of effort made in the work by the individual. An expert should always motivate the person to do better and challenge to achieve a level higher of what the individual has attained till date. Therefore, a critical judgement made by the teacher or an expert should be respected and considered in an optimistic way.
Secondly, the level of critical judgement can be widely varied depending on the field. Every field has its own style of composition. For instance, in a non-creative field, a critical judgement made by a virtuoso will be of higher preference whereas in a creative field like movie-making, its judgement is on the distinction of public or in simpler terms common- man. Hence, the critical judgement does not always rely on the connoisseur of the field.
In summary, critical judgement is crucial to one's improvement and mindset. It should be done keeping into account the person and his work. Further, a person should not consider all the criticism irrespective of experts, teachers, and peers. Some are intentionally made to lower down the confidence and motivation in the rage of competition. A person should prefer his or her own wit to finally fall upon conclusion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'achieving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: achieving
...e the person to do better and challenge to achieve a level higher of what the individual h...
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Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an optimistic way" with adverb for "optimistic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...pert should be respected and considered in an optimistic way. Secondly, the level of critical jud...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...mmary, critical judgement is crucial to ones improvement and mindset. It should be d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in summary, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.3162921348 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 33.0505617978 27% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 2235.4752809 61% => OK
No of words: 280.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90714285714 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86782823326 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 215.323595506 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517857142857 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0693440406 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1428571429 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278179209527 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996236592955 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654353478702 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166572472935 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715818562626 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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