In this age, education is a tool that helps us to obtain a good fortune in our life. And educational institution plays a pivotal role in the direction the students to which subject would be appropriate to them. So that why although somebody agrees with the statement that educational institution has a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed, I dissent from that statement because some students do not show the talents for some fields now may succeed highly in the future. In contrast, other kids who neither show talents for these fields may not succeed in this one but achieve some kind of success with the aid of knowledge of the subject. As a consequence, the prohibition from some fields which they do not show talents now may not be a wise way.
On the one hand, these institutions have some cogent reasons why they should lead their student to follow these fields which their students are likely to be a success. First, one of the most significant purpose, when a student pursues learning education, is that he wants to have a chance to get a well-paid job or a good prospect career after graduation, so that why in the process of training the institutor would know what fields would suit their students. For example, on a post which is produced by NewYork newspaper convey a story about a girl from an introverted person become a lawyer with a doctor degree base on the recommendation of her higher school teacher when she recognizes lawyer's abilities to speak eloquently and critically analyst in high school and she persuaded her to apply in a college of law and justice. Second, these institutions have a fringe view about the job market that reason they could lead you to follow the right way which you could get a job after graduation especially when the unemployment rate is increasing not only in poor countries but even in developed countries.
On the other hand, some students may succeed in a field in the future but they do not show talents in it now. Some great man might not show his advantages when he was young, but later he may reach the goal no one has reached before. Einstein, for example, was once a boy who did not good at school working. However, sometime later when his uncle taught him math, he found himself indulged in the mathematics world. No one at his time had thought that he could have attended a college and won a Nobel Prize later. He is a good example for us. In addition, students may need knowledge in the field they are not good at to succeed income in other fields. In the present, fields are not separated so differently as them in the past. Some fields may combine and give birth to a new field, while some fields need to cooperate to make their progress. For instance, there is a new field named biophysics. As we can see, it means a field combines the knowledge and technology of biology and physics. And some students are good at physics but know nothing about biology need to study biology in order to achieve something in this field. And surely they may succeed.
In conclusion, in order to succeed, students may need knowledge of many fields, one they will major in and others they do not show talents now. And it is no doubt that the institutions could help the student in finding the right majors which they could flourish. However, dissuading students from fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed is not wise. Educational institutes should not have this responsibility.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, no doubt, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2889.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 620.0 442.535393258 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65967741935 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98996985923 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60243372448 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443548387097 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 886.5 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.7718609462 60.3974514979 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.115384615 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11538461538 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437438058735 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129957781073 0.0831039109588 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137203878418 0.0758088955206 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314560370865 0.150359130593 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135024272045 0.0667264976115 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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