Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
As human society develops further, consequently there are increasing numbers of novel field studies are appearing and some fields are vanishing into eternity. One's choice of career is not a trivial process, especially when you're a freshly high school graduate student. The prompt suggests that students should pursue high salary careers rather than following their passion. In my not so humble opinion, I mostly disagree with the statement for the following reasons. Following own interest is a key in developing self-potential, thus it contributes to the self-satisfaction of the person. One more reason is that the job market tends to oscillate, today's high salary job could be in no demand tomorrow. However, in choosing their major field, one must be flexible and total dismissal of the job trend wouldn't be the wisest decision.
To begin with, passion is the key, especially when it comes to the field of study. For instance, there is been a recent trend in the USA among people in their middle 20s, those who are graduated and already enrolled in high-paying professions started to leave their jobs. A survey conducted among them showed that the most prominent reason for the resignation was a sense of dissatisfaction and lack of interest. One can infer from the example that the lucre isn't everything, however, complacency with one's life is in harmony with the personal interests. Another example, the absence of passion in the profession, subsequently leads people to do their work carelessly, offhanded and in some professions, slipshod attitude is the dangerous one. Doctors, nurses who are doing their work in a cavalier manner, imagine what would happen with the patients. Engineers who are building bridges, roads, and skyscrapers, their mistake will be catastrophic for the people. Not only passion stimulates people's attention in their occupation, but it also encourages them to develop further, to broaden their knowledge, the area of their expertise and especially zeal encourages them to be creative in what they're doing.
Furthermore, various fields of the avocation often oscillate in their demand for the workforce. The high-salary job will not be always as high and eminent, as it seems at first glance. The modern market economy dictates the trend of which professions will surge and which ones will fade away. Decision based only on the profitability of the vocation is somewhat imprudent. As an example, petroleum engineering tended to be the most high-paying field of occupation for the past 10 to 15 years, ones the oil price is dropped, the magnanimity of the employer in the same way decreased. Thus, from the example, one can infer that the fundamental law of demand and supply, determines the trend in the job market. So acting and deciding based on passion, is a reliable choice rather than evaluating a lucrative perspective of the field. Nevertheless, total dismissal of the job trends may leave prospective university graduates in precarious position. If there would be no demand in a chosen specialty, how can one accumulate experience and develop their own potential? The right answer is no, by the accounting market trend, in choosing their occupation field, one may strengthen his or her position in the volatile future of the job market.
In conclusion, the process of determining a career often complex and convoluted one. Nevertheless, a choice made on interest and passion is the most reliable one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2898.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1935483871 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92524285706 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519713261649 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 895.5 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2276958863 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.62962962963 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223248088093 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577191568842 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495078891811 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123983075836 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564896487882 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 100.480337079 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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