Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supp

I fundamentally disagree with the statement. Some people argue that the educational institutions should recommend student to pursue lucrative job in the future. In order to support this claim, the proponents points to the fact that in modern society, the financial condition is one of the most factor for individual welfare. Therefore, to lead students to be profitable careers is understandable and favorable efforts to make students in better situation. In my opinion, this claim have some reasonable points, but lacks viability. The proponents of the claim assume that the educational institutions can exactly predict the future. However, due to the complexity of the modern society, it seems to be impossible to perfectly predict the future. Therefore the encouraging students to pursue profitable careers is not likely to be successful. Rather, the attempt to predict the future situation and facilitate students to find jobs based on the suspicious prediction can be harmful to careers of students in reality.
Given that the society is changing rapidly, it is implausible to expect that present lucrative job list will be still valid in the future. For example, just few decades ago, a university professor was considered as lucrative job. But nowadays, nobody thinks the occupation is prospective. Because there are no reliable ground for the prediction of educators, the attempts to encourage students to follow the old track to the profit monger are bootless.
Furthermore, these attempts to effect on the students to find remunerative occupations based on the unreliable prediction can be even seriously deleterious to actual careers of students. That is, The educators' effort can result into driving students to worse condition. Given that the many names of jobs are already being erased, we can not be assured that the present prospective jobs will exist in the future. If the educate institutes can not predict the future exactly, it is not reasonable to try to establish the plans for them.
In conclusion, as we have seen above, in Capitalism society, it is important to be profitable figure. However, in virtue of the complexity of the modern society, it is impossible for educational institutes to exactly predict the future job market situation. Therefore the author's claim that the educator should persuade students to pursue lucrative job seems to be impossible. Moreover, it is not possible to rule out the possibility these attempts can be disadvantageous for students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31898734177 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02376423291 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475949367089 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8039483241 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.047619048 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15206080436 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563544956574 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419172021541 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104113513147 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021170974539 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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