Education in general is considered a pathway to achieve success in professional life. In this sense, there is a perspective that to be successful in a certain field means to have a lucrative career. While this perspective might be true in many senses, it’s not possible to make such a generalization. With this aspect in mind, we can say that educational institutions should incentive students to develop their skills in fields they like and might achieve success which doesn’t mean these institutions should only prepare students for lucrative careers.
Some might say that educational institutions should guide students to achieve success and by success we mean to have a career that can result in a lot of money in the future. In this context, schools and universities should prepare students to be good at what “really matters” in life and make them rely in profitable careers. This assumption might be fair, however it does not take into consideration many important elements in the educational field and the way a person achieves success.
It’s important to consider that schools and universities cannot be considered places where students go only thinking about making a lot of money in the future. This sort of perspective would hurt not only students but also educational institutions itself because the focus in the learning process would be based in subjects that are considered “profitable” and not in personal interests and vocations. This perspective about education is disparate from what we expect from educational institutions since this sort of environment should be used as an opportunity to develop ideas, boost creativity and find ways to solve problems within a society.
Moreover, in order to achieve success and a lucrative career, one needs to put a lot of effort studying a certain subject. In this context, would be very difficult to achieve success in a certain field without have a truly interest on that subject. Then, it’s possible to affirm that success and money are the result of a learning process that in first place requires a truly interest and passion with that subject. In this sense, educational institutions are not able to decide what a student is truly passionate about, these institutions might only guide them to develop their capacities and things they are good and have interest.
In this sense take the example of arts subjects like painting, acting and music. In general they are not considered a field where people can make a lot of money. This perspective doesn’t means arts should not be lectured in schools and universities considering that arts are a consequential subject in order to develop our skills that allow us to be critical towards our society. At the same time, an artist might feel as someone successful because his job is appreciated and respected which means money would not mean everything to some persons.
In conclusion, we can affirm that educational institutions should help students to improve their skills and at the same time guide them to boost their abilities in a field they might like. However, these institutions are not able to impose what careers students should take just because it is profitable career because not everybody thinks about success as a matter of money.
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...bjects like painting, acting and music. In general they are not considered a field...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, while, in conclusion, in general, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2775.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17723880597 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98501807316 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393656716418 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 875.7 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.644555996 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.75 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177990380445 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654179917379 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693770657205 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117635802482 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525917117827 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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