The main argument made in the passage is that deer might be affected by the global warming which could be related with the decrease in the population of this animal on the islands. This assumption should be better analyzed for some reasons.
Firstly, the hunters that notice this reduction might have some relation with this decrease. If they are there to hunt deer it’s possible that this activity might result in the population decrease of this animal. Even considering that hunters are not there looking for deer, their presence might influence in the dynamics of the islands which could impact in the way this animal lives in this environment.
Secondly, other elements within the islands should be better analyzed. It’s necessary to take a look if there are sick deer or any palgues which could result in a transmissible disease to the animals. It’s well know that groups of animals could face a similar disease which can affect their population reducing it or even extinguishing these animals if a treatment are not encountered. In this context, one cannot associate the decrease in deer population to global warming since the problem is inside that specific environment.
Finally, it’s stated that animals could have been not able to migrate since the ice is melting too fast with global warming. However, it’s necessary to present accurate data to demonstrate that this is happening in this specific scenario. Otherwise, the argument could be fallacious since there is the possibility that deer could still have the appropriate time to walk through the frozen waters. Many scientists already demonstrated that in certain places climatic changes is generating an intensification in a certain climatic environment. In this context, the cold weather could even be more severe in this region of the planet during a certain period of time.
Thus, the assumption that global warming is affecting the deer population should be better analyzed. In order to reinforce this assumption is necessary to evaluate whether there are no impacts from human hunters in the dynamics of deer and inside the islands itself; it’s also important to consider if there is no plagues affecting deer or other animals and vegetals that surrounds them; finally, it’s necessary to have accurate data to prove that these animal have been affected by the global warming effects.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 1939 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.049 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.562 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.257 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d be better analyzed for some reasons. Firstly, the hunters that notice this re...
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Line 7, column 659, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...s region of the planet during a certain period of time. Thus, the assumption that global w...
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Line 9, column 308, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no plagues'?
Suggestion: there are no plagues
...it's also important to consider if there is no plagues affecting deer or other animals and veg...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25520833333 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68313093666 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4453125 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.223477423 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.125 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130231215763 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498716127332 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367647713358 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837181063773 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301504694206 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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