It’s argued that the amount of mopeds available for rent should be reduced in Balmer Island in order to decrease accidents between mopeds and pedestrians. It’s also stated that Seaville is a good example of how this kind of decision helps in achieve a slower amount of accidents involving mopeds. However, this assumption should be better analyzed for some reasons.
Firstly, one should be careful in associate the reduction of accidents involving mopeds in Seaville Island only to the reduction of the amount of mopeds daily available for rent in this island. The council from this island could have improved investments in traffic related to mopeds and also it could have spent more resources in tools to educate moped users and pedestrians to behave themselves when going from one place to other in the island. In this sense, a reduction in the amount of mopeds could have been only one of the answers that Seaville council could have used and it would be not enough to resolve the problem in Balmer Island.
Secondly, the reduction in the amounts of mopeds available for rent would not guarantee the decrease in the accidents. If there is no criteria at all for people that will rent mopeds or there is poor infrastructure in Balmer Island, there is a possibility that accidents continues to have the same levels than before the reduction. One cannot use the measures from one place without making a profound research in the reasons why it worked there. It would be necessary to compare the characteristics from both Islands to understand if there are conditions to apply the measures used in Seaville Island.
Finally, it’s necessary to evaluate the importance of mopeds in both islands. If Seaville Island is smaller than Balmer Island, then mopeds could be easier changed by other transportation options. In this context, mopeds could be more important to Balmer considering the size of it and a forced reduction in the amounts of mopeds could be hurtful for business in this island. Tourist could feel less interested in go to this place since transportation could become harder to them.
In conclusion, the assumption made by Balmer Island council should be better analyzed. In order to reinforce the assumption it’s necessary to: evaluate with more attention the measures taken in Seaville Island; analyze if it’s possible to adapt this measures in Balmer Island; finally, analyze the importance of mopeds to the tourism business in Balmer Island.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- similar to argument 1
argument 3 -- somehow duplicated to argument 2
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The sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/following-appeared…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 2017 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.944 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.606 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.434 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no criteria'?
Suggestion: there are no criteria
...antee the decrease in the accidents. If there is no criteria at all for people that will rent mopeds...
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Line 5, column 391, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'profound research'.
Suggestion: profound research
... measures from one place without making a profound research in the reasons why it worked there. It ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11519607843 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69833127801 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411764705882 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.967145953 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.4375 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29403833063 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125739102665 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866615917417 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201568115948 0.128457276422 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369499284045 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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