The business manager of the television station argues that in order to have an increase in the levels of sponsorhip and audience it's necessary to spend more time of the late-night news program covering local news and weather forecast. This assumption should be better analyzed for some reasons.
Firstly, the segment of the audience that have been complaining about the lack of local news and weather forecast in the program might be not that big. If there is a segment of the audience that is composed by old people, then this segment could be not happy with the amount of time dedicated to that types of news. In this context, since elders have problems to access this kind of news from other sources this can generate complaints from them. However, this is not enough to conclude that the reduction in the audience is related to the reduced time of the program that is dedicated to local news and weather. If the minority of the audience is composed by elders, it's possible to wait many complaints from them, but they still remains as a small segment of the audience.
Secondly, it should be analyzed the way that the program works. Late-night viewers are people that are tired after a work day and in general this kind of audience wants to watch the news in a relaxed way and without have to make too much mental efforts. If the late-night news program has a new anchor and he is considered not able to transmit information in a good manner, then audience might not be very receptive to the program. At the same time, the news could be considered very long and the reporters could be considered boring and with no carisma, which could have bad impacts in the audience and quality of the program.
Finally, it should be considered the others television stations programs. If a new talk show program started to be broadcasted by a TV Channel that is an adversary of the television station, than this talk show program might be more interesting for late-night audience. In this sense, local sponsors could be more attracted by spend money advertesing in the other TV Channel. Also the audience might be more pleased with the content from the other program.
Thus, the assumption made by the business manager could be considered reckless. In order to make the statement of the business manager more feasible, it's necessary to consider the impact to the audience of people complaining about the lack of more time to local news and weather forecast in the program. It's also important to consider the quality of the contents the program has and the quality and carisma of people working on it. Finally, it would be necessary to better analyze how competitive is the program towards other television states in attracting the viewers attention.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this sense, local sponsors could be more attracted by spend money advertesing in the other TV Channel.
Error: advertesing Suggestion: advertising
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flaws:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2231 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.707 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.483 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 732, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'remain'
Suggestion: remain
...ny complaints from them, but they still remains as a small segment of the audience. ...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a relaxed way" with adverb for "relaxed"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ind of audience wants to watch the news in a relaxed way and without have to make too much menta...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
... Finally, it should be considered the others television stations programs. If a new ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...an adversary of the television station, than this talk show program might be more in...
^^^^
Line 7, column 377, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ey advertesing in the other TV Channel. Also the audience might be more pleased with...
^^^^
Line 9, column 563, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'viewers'' or 'viewer's'?
Suggestion: viewers'; viewer's
...her television states in attracting the viewers attention.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, in general, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.805907173 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54967210809 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396624472574 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7895523954 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.894736842 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9473684211 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254630353134 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947768491898 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074787233404 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173297661348 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695877808934 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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