Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Educational institutions play a pivotal role in shaping the career of students. Inchoate students, when joining an educational institution, not only do they expect quality education but also guidance about which career path to choose as they graduate. The prompt recommends that educational institutions should goad students to choose fields that provide propitious careers. I disagree with the prompt for the following reasons.
Firstly, one decade's lucrative jobs may not be next decades' hot jobs. In other words, it would be fatuous to consider that the demand for a particular job would be perennial in this rapidly evolving world. To understand what I meant, let us look at a scenario that happened in the 1960s. During the 1960s, nuclear engineering was considered to be the most promising and lucrative field for job prospects because not only many countries were involved in developing nuclear weapons but they had also announced a number of nuclear power plants that would aid power production at very low cost with meager resources. Consequently, many graduating students chose nuclear engineering as their major in anticipation of leading luxurious life ever after. However, with various issues raising later in the decade like - NIMBY(not in my backyard) and unfathomable loss that occurred at Fukushima power plant(Japan) for no mistake of humans made countries' spearheads to re-evaluate their nuclear programs. The countries were even quicker to halt their nuclear programs as they had apprehensions about what could possibly go wrong. Soon, the nuclear engineers were deprived of hefty packages leaving them in despair and the just graduated engineers soon became hopeless of their professional careers. Hence, it would only be asinine to encourage the students to choose fields that would fetch them lucrative jobs.
Moreover, one should consider how happy would a person be just by earning surplus money every month. The question to ponder upon at this point is - Is money the panacea? The answer is definitely no. For example, let us consider a person who is interested in pursuing a career in horse riding but instead, she chose a career as software engineer as the educational institution encouraged its students to hone their skills so as to secure a high paying job as software engineer. Though at first, she might be amazed to see cool offices, free food and weekend parties, the zeal won't last long. She would soon start feeling nostalgia about what would have happened if she had chosen a career of her interest. There is no wonder that she would come to office everyday staring at her computer screen that has a horse riding wallpaper and repent for the decision she has taken. Moreover, the passion for a job determines how efficiently one works. She might submit the work haphazardly only to be admonished by her boss for the inadvertent mistakes in the project that will only aggravate her agony. And it is no wonder why many people in the software industry face multitude of mental health issues at workplaces. Thus, it is important that the educational institutions encourage students to pursue careers for which they a zealous both for the benefit of the individual and the society as whole.
One can argue that nowadays, as there seems to be no dearth in the kind of lucrative jobs to choose from, the educational institutions should exhort the students to only vouch for lucrative jobs. But, is it not a good reason to go after your passion? The likelihood of earning a high pay check if one follows their passion was never as high as it is presently. Hence, it is good if the educational institutions pique students to pursue careers of their interests rather than going after careers that seem lucrative at the moment only to have an epiphany later that all that glitters is not gold.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one decade', 'a decade', or simply 'decades'?
Suggestion: one decade; a decade; decades
...or the following reasons. Firstly, one decades lucrative jobs may not be next decades ...
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Line 4, column 1092, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...ms as they had apprehensions about what could possibly go wrong. Soon, the nuclear engineers w...
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Line 7, column 422, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...raged its students to hone their skills so as to secure a high paying job as software en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, as to, for example, i mean, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3197.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 633.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05055292259 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71536160877 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 316.0 215.323595506 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499210110585 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 984.6 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3898701658 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.178571429 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6071428571 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.10714285714 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226392843985 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619272718994 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063141937993 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157752803636 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492880927109 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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