The effectiveness of a country’s leaders is best measured by examing the well-being of that country’s citizens.
This statement emphasizes when we determine the effectiveness of a country’s leaders, the citizens’ welfare and satisfaction is the best criterion for those circumstances. It seems plausible because any leaders even those of a household cannot be able to neglect the members who they have to lead. However, this statement seems also too generalized to be accepted in all of the circumstances in the world because of the reasons I would like to elaborate at the following essay.
Admittedly, in many countries, the topic is compelling and acceptable those government needs to encourage them for the welfare of national people. Furthermore, the measurement by examing the well-being of a country’s citizens is effective because it can be easily shown by a reliable statistic data. In this case, the economic growth is one of the most important problem related to the people’s well-being. GDP per capita, for example, can be a representative point to discern about which countries are in a prosperous status or suffered in very severe poverty. Even the developed countries such as United States, France, or South Korea, lots of voters have judged the leader’s performance regarding on the economic success during the remainder of the government. To sum up, the measurement by well-being of general citizens is the most important factor to assess the performance of a leadership and very effective because everyone can access the results by just a short numbers.
However, the meaning of effectiveness seems quite different to people in some countries. That word have been used for success of general citizens in many countries, however, in North Korea, it may sound quite quirky and bizzare. North Korean media always report about the dictator’s – Kim Jong Un – strong and charismatic leadership in all the time. Government in the country have concentrated all the national performance to military industries such as programs of ICBM, nuclear powers, and even bio-chemical weapons which threatens the nearby nations in Northeast Asia. Nevertheless the deletrious and pernicuous policies of N. Korea, however, it may be efficient to sustain its regime from extrinsic attacks because even the most powerful country, United States, seems reluctant to take preemptive strikes to the dictatorship. This example sounds very extremely to me, but at least North Korean people have believed the effectiveness of the leadership is not a welfare of all citizens, but the survive of its nations.
Furthermore, the statement seems to be regardless of the other possible factors when determing the effectiveness of the leadership of a country. For example, United States and Japan have been prospering in economic fields, however, those countries have also been a leading country in variety of fields such as science and popular culture. Every people in the world may at least have heard about the moive ‘Titanic’ from Hollywood in Los Angeles. This is a representative case that the cultural influence also can be a factor in determining the effectiveness of a leadership in a country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: all the
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Suggestion: Nevertheless,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, at least, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2640.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 492.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36585365854 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21063269531 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487804878049 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 828.9 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5410390094 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341233719415 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097757103831 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101464923609 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21842861461 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920277525329 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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