The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author asserts that changing showerheads to decrease water flow have to be implemented throughout all of the buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex because it will clearly make significantly more profits to it than before. Regarding to the examples the author has shown in the letter, it seems plausible that all twelve buildings in the complex are needed to modifying showerheads. However, because of the reasons I would like to elaborate at the following essay, the author’s claim is rife with holes and assumptions, not thus, strong enough to lead the manager of complex to changing all the showerheads.
First, the author have to be answered about that this change will really result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation. According to the letter, it seems that even the author is not clearly sure to the prediction about the water usage before and after the policy. Moreover, other factors may cause an increasing of the entire water usage in the complex because taking a shower cannot be the only factor related to the water usage. For example, we have to need use lots of water for laundry, dishwashing, cleaning, and more chores in household. Water usage used for those works are needed to be saved in a proper level, however, it does not mean that we can be confident the decrease of entire water usage in the complex by implementing the new policy. To sum up, the author should explain about the other possible remaining factors related to readings of water usage in the complex.
Second, the author shows that just a few complaints about the low water pressure had been impugned by the resident living in the complex. However, the author needs to evidence how much the real number of the complaints are because we just do not know if the evinced data is shown just an uncertained quantifier like ‘a few’. The complaints may be ‘a few’ irritations to the owner, however, its number may be actually one thousand or more. Furthermore, the author presumed that a few complaints are able to warrant there are no problems with showers from the adjustment in the complex. However, it just took one month ago, which may be a very short time for watching the real effect of changing showerheads. In summary, the author is strongly recommended to provide further information for answering question a few complaints about low water pressure really can warrant that nothing problems are happened in the complex.
Finally, the author needs to prove that all the circumstances of the buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex is clearly equivalent to each other. Because we may envision some different or even extremely bizarre situations about the other nine buildings in the complex. For instance, some apartments among those buildings may be on relatively highlands which may cause a serious low water pressure because of the distance from the water to the households in this building. In this case, changing showerheads may not be a sufficient solution to fix the problem.
The low water pressure is one of the most significant problems for the living in any residence because we cannot live without using the water. However, in the lights of the counterparts above, the author’s claim cannot be fully agreed with.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2636 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.617 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.886 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... flow have to be implemented throughout all of the buildings in the Sunnyside Towers compl...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 764, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended providing'.
Suggestion: recommended providing
...ads. In summary, the author is strongly recommended to provide further information for answering quest...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in summary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 544.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04227941176 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73894776441 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439338235294 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 857.7 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0707591388 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.619047619 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9047619048 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209976629622 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736716811441 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605961493359 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12959113422 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760227902104 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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