"The first step to self-knowledge is rejection of the familiar."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The speaker asserts that the knowledge gained by oneself originates from the rejection of predefined notions and norms and I completely agree with author's point of view. The statement can be bolstered by few examples which i will present in order to validate the issue.
Self-realization comes with deep knowledge of one's self. One acquires knowledge from different sources and learns new things being in different environments. To gain knowledge about something or deeply study a phenomenon, one has to come out of one's comfort zone. More intense self-knowledge is the bigger rejection familiar environment has to face. Therefore, I totally agree with the speaker's assertion that the first step to self-knowledge is the rejection of the familiar.
The familiarity of things, thoughts, and ideas make us comfortable and we feel more complacent, thus limiting ourselves from discovering new perspectives within ourselves and around us. One cannot grow and succeed unless he tries to get out of his comfort level and fight against the "obvious" elements of his surroundings. To bring about a change, should be the motto of one's life. People who reject the familiar customs and traditions of the world, in order to find something more valuable, are always the people who bring change in our society. Consider the example of Mother Teresa, who worked magnanimously for the betterment of poor and needy children. She did not even think of once, before devoting her life to helping these people to overcome poverty. At the age of 18, it was uncommon for a girl to become a nun at such a young age. If she would have never taken these audacious steps, to selflessly help the poor would be able to inspire the youth at that time to change one's mentality?
It is not only about a change in society but also the development of oneself. A person should be adaptive enough to sustain in all kinds of environments. For instance, a person living in New York has a very busy and happening life is suddenly asked to move to a backward area due to recession. It will be very hard for him to adjust to life in this area initially. But later, he will realize that because of this change he would have got the knowledge of different cultures and people. Similarly, one has to always look for different ways to gain knowledge.
However, it is also true that people also learn from the environment which is familiar to them but the area of learning is very limited. It is the aberration from the normal order which tends to open the path for self-knowledge and ultimately the success, but in order to be so, we need to have the courage and will to reject the notions. Therefore, in order to learn more one has to contradict the familiar beliefs and thoughts. So, rejection of the familiar is rightly the only path to self-knowledge!
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...dy a phenomenon, one has to come out of ones comfort zone. More intense self-knowled...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, similarly, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.825 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89173712412 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502272727273 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8343925268 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3043478261 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141629529038 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047231393781 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586576252945 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960476594399 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602557630501 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.