Reading paper materials is better than watching electronic devices to gain information.
Though we are in the 21st century now and technology has grown tremendously, people might not want to change their historic ritual or habit and continue to do the same even now. But it is not the case with me, I like to adapt to new things and ways because I get bored doing the same things in the same ways. Similarly, when the topic says that reading paper materials is better than gaining that information digitally via electronic devices, I do not comply with it. To explain my viewpoint I have two major reasons.
Firstly, reading through papers was considered a very good practice to learn anything and it is still now but I differ in this opinion. Though reading through paper helps us to understand the topic comprehensively, the reader has to be at his pinnacle of reading with concentration and has to focus on every word. Whereas, I feel that when people watch a video they can understand the topic more easily as by seeing things people can relate very quickly. While watching people can connect to it in a better way than reading. For instance, the learning apps that are in the market nowadays help students get a better perspective than the textbooks and gives them a better exposure. Furthermore, I feel that while reading people may lose their attention very quickly but while watching they may feel more intrigued.
Moreover, the textbooks we use to read do not provide that interest to a reader that he expects. For instance I rememeber when I was in high school, textbooks of history and geography were so banal and dull that people could not even read for more than ten minutes. Without any pictures I did not find it any fascinating and was always interested in wataching online videos about the topics after that. The online videos would contain exciting pictures, animations and short clips that would never get me bored. So, I feel studying digitally is a better way as it makes you feel that you are a part of what you are watching.
Therefore, to conclude I would like to say that in my view through watching, people can grasp more information and learn better from the topic rather than reading. The ever developing technology has paved way for people to modify their rituals to get better so rather than sticking to it we must try to improve and abide by the advancements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... things people can relate very quickly. While watching people can connect to it in a ...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ntrigued. Moreover, the textbooks we use to read do not provide that interest to...
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Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...le can grasp more information and learn better from the topic rather than reading. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, still, therefore, whereas, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in my view, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67813267813 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56069168556 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5215962085 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262458683408 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081840783443 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100712814728 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146998109478 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540327883861 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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