The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.

Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream — a dairy product made from milk — at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The letter written by the author to relannian newspaper is about performance and suggestion about milk industry thriving in the relannian. The auhtor given some inside fact about the milk industry in relannian. The author explain the industry analysts report, but while explaining he/she didn’t explain things.

First of all, the author mesntion industry analyst report in the letter, though industry analyst reports are synthesys by the experts, but hey are not correct 100%. It’s had been seen multiple times in past, that industry reports are not reflection of the reallife senario. To give an example: In india last year industry report conclude that: india might be third largest economy by last qurter of 2019-2020. But as we all know that how volatile global economy is. Now industry analyst saying that it might be not possible to achieve 3rd rank till 2023. So it’s hard to believe on industry analyst resports.

Secondly, the author given explaination about the increase in milk production due to use of the latest technology in milk process. Giving full credit to technology is wrong, There are many Non banking financial companies and the bank given loan to farmers. And also regional government trained farmers to revamp milk production to next level. Thats mean technology development ofcourse helps to increase milk production in the relannain but author should not neglect helps from other sectors like financial institutes and regional government.

Moreover, labour cost in the city is lowest in decade, but the author didn’t mention reason behind that. It might be due compitaion raise in employees or due to lack of skills employees are ready to work in the less price.

Also, Considering all this good enviournment, milk production might be profitable but as per the author said that, price of the milk per unit increasing day by day. That’s mean their might be issue in demand and supply or due to lack of knowledge farmers not able fix math behind milk production.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, while, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 327.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18654434251 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62167456581 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562691131498 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6170836549 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7647058824 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221466084644 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726542249334 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466830577027 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110178539151 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599169430538 0.0667264976115 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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