The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The provided passage suggest that attractive new dormitories would make flow of more number of students enroll at Buckingham. Yet sufficient evidence is not included in support of this claim. To make a strong claim, one need to how many total students are to be enrolled, how much space is required for the new students and how much more cost is needed to afford of campus housing.
First, the arguer claims lack reliable informtaion. To assume the claim cogent one must include the data about the number of students enrollment. Thus there will be a clear determination whether new dormitories are required or not. Data should be reliable based on the current scientific calculation as the enrollment is calculated on the current trend.
Further, the director standpoint is that the existing dormitory are inadequate for number of students who are yet to enroll in Buckingham. In scrutiny of this, the claim is unfounded. It is nowhere explained; how many students are enrolling and how many dormitories are required. The present dormitories would be enough for new comer. According to passage, it is said that enrollmet will be double over 50 years but it seems the author in unaware about the changes that may happen in between the time as nothing remains the remain for long. Here this claim weakens the argument made by the writer.
Furthermore, the author conclude about increasing cost of off-campus housing. H/s is unable to present housing status around Buckingham college. Being unable to potray why off-campus housing can be difficult to students, the author seems to bloster this argument wishfully. The director of student housing would have been butressed by some third parties so that they can get tender for constructing dormitories.
Thus the argument is unsound. The evidence in support of conclusion that Buckingham college needs a number of new dormitories are futile. Ultimately the argument fails in supporting the assumption made by director in accordance to build new dormitorie fornew enrollment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ousing. First, the arguer claims lack reliable informtaion. To assume the clai...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...bout the number of students enrollment. Thus there will be a clear determination whe...
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...present dormitories would be enough for new comer. According to passage, it is said that ...
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... in between the time as nothing remains the remain for long. Here this claim weakens the a...
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... unable to potray why off-campus housing can be difficult to students, the author...
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...y. The director of student housing would have been butressed by some third partie...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...tender for constructing dormitories. Thus the argument is unsound. The evidence i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19817073171 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80661233499 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524390243902 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1280825528 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.25 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233107712868 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700496976168 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07962082745 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131898975154 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391486761574 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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