The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The provided passage suggest that attractive new dormitories would make flow of more number of students enroll at Buckingham. Yet sufficient evidence is not included in support of this claim. To make a strong claim, one need to how many total students are to be enrolled, how much space is required for the new students and how much more cost is needed to afford of campus housing.
First, the arguer claims lack reliable informtaion. To assume the claim cogent one must include the data about the number of students enrollment. Thus there will be a clear determination whether new dormitories are required or not. Data should be reliable based on the current scientific calculation as the enrollment is calculated on the current trend.
Further, the director standpoint is that the existing dormitory are inadequate for number of students who are yet to enroll in Buckingham. In scrutiny of this, the claim is unfounded. It is nowhere explained; how many students are enrolling and how many dormitories are required. The present dormitories would be enough for new comer. According to passage, it is said that enrollmet will be double over 50 years but it seems the author in unaware about the changes that may happen in between the time as nothing remains the remain for long. Here this claim weakens the argument made by the writer.
Furthermore, the author conclude about increasing cost of off-campus housing. H/s is unable to present housing status around Buckingham college. Being unable to potray why off-campus housing can be difficult to students, the author seems to bloster this argument wishfully. The director of student housing would have been butressed by some third parties so that they can get tender for constructing dormitories.
Thus the argument is unsound. The evidence in support of conclusion that Buckingham college needs a number of new dormitories are futile. Ultimately the argument fails in supporting the assumption made by director in accordance to build new dormitorie fornew enrollment.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Ultimately the argument fails in supporting the assumption made by director in accordance to build new dormitorie fornew enrollment.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to dormitorie and fornew
Sentence: First, the arguer claims lack reliable informtaion.
Error: informtaion Suggestion: information
Sentence: According to passage, it is said that enrollmet will be double over 50 years but it seems the author in unaware about the changes that may happen in between the time as nothing remains the remain for long.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: enrollmet Suggestion: enrollment
Sentence: Being unable to potray why off-campus housing can be difficult to students, the author seems to bloster this argument wishfully.
Error: wishfully Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: bloster Suggestion: bluster
Error: off-campus Suggestion: off campus
Error: potray Suggestion: portray
Sentence: The director of student housing would have been butressed by some third parties so that they can get tender for constructing dormitories.
Error: butressed Suggestion: buttressed
Sentence: Ultimately the argument fails in supporting the assumption made by director in accordance to build new dormitorie fornew enrollment.
Error: fornew Suggestion: fore
Error: dormitorie Suggestion: dormitories
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1659 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.043 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.73 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.599 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.3 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.024 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ousing. First, the arguer claims lack reliable informtaion. To assume the clai...
^^
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...bout the number of students enrollment. Thus there will be a clear determination whe...
^^^^
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: NEW_COMER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newcomer'?
Suggestion: newcomer
...present dormitories would be enough for new comer. According to passage, it is said that ...
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Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... in between the time as nothing remains the remain for long. Here this claim weakens the a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... unable to potray why off-campus housing can be difficult to students, the author...
^^
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y. The director of student housing would have been butressed by some third partie...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...tender for constructing dormitories. Thus the argument is unsound. The evidence i...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19817073171 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80661233499 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524390243902 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1280825528 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.25 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233107712868 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700496976168 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07962082745 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131898975154 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391486761574 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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