Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The era of advanced technologies and development certainly requires privacy among every other individual. People are in competition with every single person in our society. While some people do not agree with the statement that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy, I agree with the statement. I feel this way for several reasons which will be discussed further in this essay.
Firstly, people need to have privacy needless their status or position. Every person has their own routine of life. Celebrities and athletes have a higher standard to maintain. In order to stay away from paparazzi and media with an unnecessary question, more privacy is needed to nowadays. In contrast, they should be provided with extra security.
Additionally, athletes and entertainers have a different kind of lifestyles and way of living. They have their own kind of diet routine through which they are able to maintain the physique and intelligence. For example, let's talk about the Usian bolt, the world champion in running. He has his own kind of diet that makes him strong and what incomes he makes in his career. Furthermore, people are jealous of having such lavish lifestyles of famous entertainers and athletes and people keep on interpreting them.
Lastly, holding such a standard in society, they are in constant threat of people who are not able to reach their position and who envy about their success. For instance, when I was in my high school, there was a news about the famous entertainer who had gained fame in short period of time but had to lose his life soon as he acquired that position since no privacy was provided to him.
In conclusion, I believe that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy because they are in constant threat of losing their life and fame as well as they have a standard to maintain among the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in short, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9746835443 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66373750892 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512658227848 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2969297199 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4705882353 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11764705882 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302514142168 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982900307431 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105630400922 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184984567022 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837308764598 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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