The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café.
The writer assumes that Monarch Books should open a café to attract new customer and stop children’s book section due to decline in population of children below ten. However, there is no evidence to support writer’s claim.
Firstly, the writer assumes that because Monarch has been in business at that place for nearly twenty years so opening a café will bring new customers. But in depth analysis of the statement there is flaw in writer’s assumption because there might be a café in that locality and the people in that locality would prefer going there instead of Monarch’s café.
Secondly, the writer states that the children’s book section should be discontinued and space must be made for café because children’s book section will be unpopular because there is significant decline is population of children below ten. This statement would have been strengthened if writer would give evidence related to the decline in population of children in nearby locality. There might be possibility that there is increase in population of children under ten in nearby locality and steep decline in population nation-wide.
Finally, the writer states that by opening a café, Monarch Books can compete with Regal Books who has recently opened a café. But writer fails to give any evidence that by opening a cafe Regal Books has achieved success to attract more customers. Only if the writer produces any evidence that by opening a café in Monarch Books will boost it sales and attract new customer then it is practical for Monarch books to open café.
In conclusion, form given information the writer’s evidence lends little credible support to his claim. Had the writer given any evidence about any other book store which had opened a café and was capable to attract customers, then it would bolster the writer’s claims of opening a café.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 305.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20327868852 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82831310362 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 215.323595506 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426229508197 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6164124093 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.25 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206148699187 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990804839409 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896043485929 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137543049489 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783333897422 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 100.480337079 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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