Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
I mostly agree with the prompt that our mental and spiritual aspects are trapped when passed through formal education. The reason for such is because of two factors listed in the following passages.But, I do concede that in some cases main stream education also helps in certain ways.
To begin, Each individual has a different approach towards each and every problem and teaching every student with a single approach, indeed, hinders the mental and spiritual freedom. For example, if a students is better in understanding things with pragmatic approach rather than theoretical approach is compared with another student who is better in grasping things theoretically .The latter one will conspicuously understand concepts easily and this is because of the formal way of educating. thus, not applying different methods for different types of students apparently impedes, the growth and freedom of mental and spiritual state .
Secondly, traditional way of educating also blocks alternate way of thinking to complex problems and circumscribes the flexibility of thinking.For instance, most of the students with formal education will always tend to one find of solution as thy all are trained for approaching the problems with same way. also, if a student with formal education is placed with a student who is "street smart", street smart individual would outsmart the formally educated indivudial in most of the situations. As the first individual had learned solution for multiple problems from many trials and errors of heterogeneous approachs.thus formally educated student would be encapsulated into a state of captive mind and soul.
Further more, I would also agree to the fact that formal education does also helps in few aspects of thinking which might be helpful. For example, In multiple occations there might be cases where an individual is unable to find the solution to a problem then in such kind of cases knowning a traditional approach would be "life-saving". thus , in some cases it it good to have formal education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, kind of, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 33.0505617978 30% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 323.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39318885449 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08487280721 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.7014726964 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.363636364 118.986275619 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3636363636 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 5.21951772744 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141809089879 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591852229118 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323950846743 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892032740221 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257576314275 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.1392134831 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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