The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.
I strongly agree with the passage that when many people of the society question the authority the well-being is enhanced for the two reasons.
Firstly, Questioning the authorities would lead to the better understanding of the system's working and the challenges faced by the system and authorities. So people could help co-operating with the authorities. for example if the people are aware about the working of the system they might be able to provide the solution to the problems faced by the authorities. Also, in the times of difficulties people would be willing to co-operate with the authorities as their questioning would impart some awareness about the situations.thus, the above example illustrates that the
Further, It enhances the possibility to reduce money laundering and increases the enrollement of people in the goverment jobs thus enabling more variety of job opportunities. For instance, if many people question the authorities about each nuances there would be no room for money laundering and scandals as the people would be aware of the process. People would also start to take interest in this avenue and would take initiatives to make it better by enorelling themself into the system.
Thus , In conclusion I would agree to the prompt that the well-being of a society is enanches when many of its people question authorities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1139.0 2235.4752809 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 218.0 442.535393258 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2247706422 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.55969084622 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0154277591 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 215.323595506 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 704.065955056 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.7580079993 60.3974514979 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.375 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.21951772744 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366285328947 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193007730548 0.0831039109588 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176940167155 0.0758088955206 233% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319357939923 0.150359130593 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167081727322 0.0667264976115 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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