Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the
position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold
true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author forwards his stance on the formal education of the students by stating it as a hinderance which curbs the free thinking of the
pupil. He blames the conventional teaching system as a restraint set on a creative mind. Understanding his perspective becomes easy in
the 21st century as numerous celebrities and social personalities flaunt their street knowledge and hard work as the key to their success.
In todays world, along with these 'hip' social figures, entrepreneurs and men of providence also propagate the futility of the knowledge
gained in school and the progressive approach towards unconventional ways of imparting knowledge.
Taking into account the life of Billionaire Bill Gates or Mark Zuckerberg, it is evident that views of these men align closely with that
of the author's line of thinking. Formal education was a means to end to these people and their actual education started when these men
dropped out of the universities. If we take these examples as the milestones in our thinking process, then the formal education does
indeed hinder our imagination, forcing us to walk a well trodden path without any significant creativity. The conventional approach of
knowledge acquisition then curbs our mind in the fence by its traditional ways.
But on the other hand, the conventional way of teaching has given us numerous laurates in the past. Reviewing the life of Nobel Laurate and
Physicist C V Ramkrishnan, we could easily infer that the traditional ways of teaching does pave the path towards a glorious success.
The pupils taught in the traditional manner can also rise to their potent creativity after finding a foundation from which they soar in
conventional teaching methods. The traditional methods, if anything, form the base which helps the student grow and concretize his ideas.
Many other scholars like Mr. Ramkrishnan would profuse that the university imbibed them with the skills which help them acheive the feats of
success to which they have risen today.
So it can be assumed that the traditional ways of teaching do have their pros and cons. Curbing the imagination or amplifying it depends
solely on the receptor of that knowledge and not the way in which the knowledge was imparted. Both the ways of education have evolved
over centuries through human experience and cannot be validated without taking into account the position of the student.
In conclusion, it can be said that the author does have some basis for his statement, which would hold true in todays world. But it does
not mean that the opposite statement is wrong. it simply means that these both are parallel facts and the creativity and imagination of
student depends solely on his IQ.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15470852018 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81107356171 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52466367713 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3834962215 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4736842105 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31578947368 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.97078651685 443% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140772611686 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441332520441 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363113319453 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0408291376331 0.150359130593 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348655665599 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.