Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Education plays important role in people’s life. Education includes everything not just what we learn through books or any formal education.humans have evolved into most intellectual species and its credit goes to education .In my view formal education plays vital role and thus I strongly oppose the view that formal education limits our minds and spirits.Though the formal education seems to restrict us in opening up ourselves but is the basic platform that is needed for the advancement .
Although,some forms of education seem to be outdated and needs to be modified or removed completely.To exemplify, some schools and colleges force students to adhere to the policies and knowledge, and limit the capabilities of the students.we can see the most notable personalities as Elon musk,Bill gates who were college drop out as they believed that formal education was bounding them to stick to it.They achieved zenith of their carrer in their respective fields though they could never finish their education.
Nonetheless,Formal education acts as basement in one’s life by supporting and encouraging us to move forward.If we see great scholastic achievements in any filed they are only possible as the pioneers in their respective fields had a formal education which shaped them in organizing their dreams.For example, For a doctor be successful he needs to learn everything ahead before treating the patients.one small mistake by doctor may risk a patients life.ergo,formal education of how a disease can be diagnosed ? and what treatment should de administered ? ; All such procedures and methods are learnt through years of formal education and nothing can replace formal education.
Some people argue that in fields as business one cannot learn much through education;They support their point by pointing out evidence of successful ventures like Kfc and Mittal steels whose founders never had a formal education;However,The probability of success is much higher in cases where people had formal education and prior experience as more people trust and rely on them based on their formal history and one can easily persuade others by their background.
In sum, It is advisable to have some formal education before venturing out because we will be more equipped to face the evolving challenges but there should a fine balance between formal education and freedom to pursue what needs to be done.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, thus, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35459183673 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06378285475 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579081632653 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 23.0359550562 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 195.963211463 60.3974514979 324% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 233.222222222 118.986275619 196% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.5555555556 23.4991977007 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326268402449 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194782646483 0.0831039109588 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.289688535777 0.0758088955206 382% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266188664566 0.150359130593 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.331249500872 0.0667264976115 496% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.5 14.1392134831 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.37 48.8420337079 40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 12.1743820225 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.64 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.2143820225 171% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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