Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
I disagree the statement that formal education restricts students' minds and spirits. In the opposite, I believe that education encourages the variaty of thinking.
In the modern education system, students are encouraged to show their own view which motivate independent thought. In many courses in college, students are encouraged to ask questions during classes. Asking question helps student to digest the things that they learned into their own knowledge. Additionally, having a chance to ask question also force students to try to share their opinion to others clearly. Thinking independently and practicing how to share their opinion makes student a independent thinker, which has advantage on setting people’s mind free.
Being well educated also broaden people's view, which is positive to the diversity of the society. Decades ago, schools are not allowed to teach things about homosexual. At that time, there were many misunderstandings about their relationships and the whole society were unfriendly to the group of people. Homosexual couples are seen as a problem in the group and often get bullied. Fortunately, through education, people now understand what homosexual is and a majority group of public are willing to fight for rights. In this situation, education plays an important role in breaking the limitation and could changing the world better.
However, some unproper education design do restrain people's mind. For instance, in China, people were not allowed to discuss certain thesis such as politic problem. People could only say positive thing and learn all the information that supports the honor of the country. The authority government that controls the whole education system restricts people’s mind. China people never have a chance to even think about if they were treated in a right way, in other words, it is hard to realize that they were restricted.
In conclusion, authority formal education might restrict people’s mind. However, a good education system plays an important role in setting people free and changing the world to a more diversity and friendly environment to all groups of people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...iew which motivate independent thought. In many courses in college, students are e...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ow to share their opinion makes student a independent thinker, which has advantag...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'change'
Suggestion: change
...le in breaking the limitation and could changing the world better. However, some unp...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...o even think about if they were treated in a right way, in other words, it is hard to realize ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 334.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43413173653 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79794063535 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559880239521 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1570472693 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.75 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125562902813 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044744596975 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471097087162 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835839022036 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03141461902 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.