The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to the study, it is suggested that hiring people who sleep less than 6 hours per night could profit the company. However, some of these assumption should be considered.
The study assumed that the result of executives can be inferred to all the employees. Whereas the responsibility depends on the position they are in, and the sleeping hours they need may be different. For example, labors need long time sleep in order to have the energy to be productive, but what advertising executives do during working days is compared less energy needed. Thus, the company should report the sleep hours each position needs to reach a better conclusion.
Even if successful executives sleep less than 6 hours, it does not infer that people with fewer sleep hours can be good executives. It should be considered if all these executives used to sleep no more than 6 hours. It may be possible that they used to sleep longer but in order to afford the heavy works, the executive lessen the sleeping hours. In this situation, it the not necessary to hire people who sleep less since the heavy work will force them to do so.
Since the data of the study came from self report, the reality should be examined. Maybe all these advertising executives tend to report less sleeping hours to show how hard they work. In addition, how many successful executives are there? If there were only 10 productive executives out of 300 in the report, and 5 of them reported to sleep less than 6 hours, the evidence is not enough to reach the conclusion.
In conclusion, the argument should be fully examined to claim that people sleep less than 6 hours could be productive employees.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 289 350
No. of Characters: 1340 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.123 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.637 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.638 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
...ld profit the company. However, some of these assumption should be considered. The study assu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, whereas, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79930795848 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5640675412 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494809688581 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 705.55239521 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3702713919 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.4666666667 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206706739544 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864066426889 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499400229843 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129121488662 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342865836349 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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