“Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education plays a vital role in upbringing and creativity of an individual, and it is also the most important factor in the success of an individual. The Author’s statement claims that, we will be more free without formal education seems quite reasonable. It is a well know fact that our mind adepts very fast when we are in our early development age, and by giving us plausibility to experiment will definitely make our mind more creative.
To begin with, creativity is a path to success, and formal education restricts an individual’s creativity. Let’s consider an example, let say a student have more predilection towards learning a musical instrument, but due to the formal education procedure he is restricted. If he wants to learn how to play an musical instrument he has to devote an extra time and will also require spending extra money, other than the education which he is provided in school. In order to learn the instrument. Subsequently, he will seclude himself from school.
In Addition, history also have many examples which suggests formal education is only restraining our minds and spirits. Einstein, Newton, Mark—ceo of facebook, and many more, are a paragon, who went against the formal education and ended up, building or creating something new and innovating. When an individual is free from any restrain he/she trend to experiment, tends to go out of the box to create something new, something they are interested in. These restricted ways of teaching is just killing our creativity.
However, we cannot deny the importance of the rules and regulations, this brings discipline among students. But being too strict on the rules and regulation in an eduction also kill’s ones creativity, so it is important to have right balance between them. Success rate of an individual is not just determined by his open mind and spirit, but also how much dedication, discipline, and passionate he/she is towards his/her goals. Formal education is very useful in order to bring such kind of discipline in one’s life and it is very important for one to succeed.
In conclusion, we cannot deny the importance of the rules and regulation, but to be more creative we have to set free our mind and spirit, and this can only be achieved by not restraining ourself by restricted education procedures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...icted. If he wants to learn how to play an musical instrument he has to devote an ...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'trends'.
Suggestion: trends
...vidual is free from any restrain he/she trend to experiment, tends to go out of the b...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ulation in an eduction also kill's ones creativity, so it is important to have ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, as to, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09635416667 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0137927562 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5390625 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9377121496 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.117647059 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163899832549 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536500268539 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040766270369 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0965120165507 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167362700987 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.