It is believed that the success of the country is depends on the well-being of their people instead of considering how many attainments has been achieved by the nation's professionals such as artists, rulers, or scientists. Regarding this issue, I agree that the strength of particular nation is indicated by the massive development of the work created by their community members in every sectors. First this essay will examine why general welfare is not an indication of the greatness of the country, and it will follow by a reason that sort of achievements will be the tangible proof of the country's development.
Measuring all aspect of welfare including education, health and economic stability of certain nation will be the best for studying the wellness of their society rather than showing the strength of the country itself. To distinguish one country to another, each of them absolutely has to show this criteria, in which the people are having good economy, health and education. However, this is not enough since the biggest challenge is the improvement of the citizen's productivity in each realms they are working at. Therefore, when government can ensure that the people can achieve more than welfare which is achievement, the nation could be seen as a great state.
Contributing as an active and productive individuals in such nation is agreed as a hard job, not only they have to create major breakthrough, they also have winning the competition among others. When they can be at the first place, they will make their nation proud and it will make other countries respect of that nation. Looking at the International Science Competition for example, we know that the competitors coming from all over the world, and this prestigious event only can be won by a single person with bright idea. In 2015, a scientist from Indonesia was a winner of this competition, and he has proven that a student from developing country could bring the medals for the first time. Thus, the name of Indonesia suddenly well-known among the science realm.
By way of conclusion, I believe that the strength of one country is not only seen by how the welfare is but how can the people can achieve productivity and getting an attainment is one of the proof of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: breakthrough
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...n attainment is one of the proof of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, look, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9501312336 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78719643753 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517060367454 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.8148921689 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.076923077 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3076923077 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 5.21951772744 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182189059162 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675098532216 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597525967495 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117292636714 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571012449922 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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