The statement claiming that the general welfare of a nation's people is a better indicator is partially right. The nation is comprised of different types of people who are interested in various different activities. These activities are indicative of whether the general populace is satisfied, happy and feels safe to pursue these activities.
Rulers, artists and scientists are all representatives of their nation. Their achievements are indicative of the state of the nation. These factions, especially scientists and artists, can only prosper if they are given the proper support and are actively encouraged to undertake these endeavors. Taking the example of India. In India many parents actively encourage their wards to study hard and pursue a doctors' or an engineers' degree. But in doing so, the students are discouraged from participating in sports. Also discouraged are the fields of arts such as music or dance, considering these as merely hobbies rather than serious professional careers. So the outcome is that these wards when they grow up and start working, they will have a greater chance of accomplishing in fields which are traditionally considered serious such as engineers or doctors.
Now, the general welfare of a country depends on three things. First is the safety of the citizens. How safe do the citizens perceive themselves as? is a very pertinent question. The citizens might also feel that the justice mechanisms might be failing. Another factor is whether the citizens' needs and wants are met. Finally the welfare of the people might lie in whether the people feel that they can pursue their dream or not. These are all pertinent factors in determining the welfare of the nation.
Hence I will disagree with the statement that the general welfare of the nation's people is a better indicator of that nation's greatness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
...ndicator is partially right. The nation is comprised of different types of people who are inter...
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Suggestion: a doctor; doctors
...ge their wards to study hard and pursue a doctors or an engineers degree. But in doing so...
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Suggestion: Also,
...scouraged from participating in sports. Also discouraged are the fields of arts such...
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Suggestion: Is
...do the citizens perceive themselves as? is a very pertinent question. The citizens...
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Suggestion: Finally,
...r the citizens needs and wants are met. Finally the welfare of the people might lie in ...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...ermining the welfare of the nation. Hence I will disagree with the statement that...
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Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ns people is a better indicator of that nations greatness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 299.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20401337793 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80764001856 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518394648829 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.3368227824 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.95 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205318394364 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634147269938 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080532072527 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153229921542 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716477897277 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.