Is it possible for a nation to be great while providing opportunities unequally for its citizens? It depends on the definition of greatness. For all of antiquity, opportunities to thrive were given unequally among incumbents, which was the case of both city - states and larger empires, so it may have been the case in ancient cultures. But it is also important to see that, in today's world, people are more and more aware of their chances of success, which raises the question of what makes a nation great.
Considering the ancient world, it can be argued that societies of the likes of Greece and Roma provided great opportunities for its people to develop as artists, entrepreneurs, philosophers, and so forth. Both became the great powers of their times and their influences have echoes in our days - in modern western countries, law and language have been strongly influenced by greek and roman cultures. However the general welfare of the citizens of Roma and Greece was not as great as their influences may suggest. Indeed, slavery was official in those empires, allowing absolutely no social mobility for an important number of citizens (they were not even considered to be citizens). Was the Roman Empire considered a great nation back in the dawn of the current era? Perhaps it was to some, but it can be hard to assert that it was a great nation to those whose social status amounted to less than second class citizens.
If in the ancient world such great, influential powers did not undoubtedly clasify as great powers because of how they treated the many, the term "great" should be carefully studied when applied to today's societies. One instance of a country that may be considered great by the many is the United States. Taking a look at the figures of visa demands, it is possible to see that there is an ever increasing number of people trying to get into the US. Among many others, the reason behind this trend is that opportunities in that country are much more equally accessible than in others. For example, people can attend college in the US because, in spite of the high tuition fees, there are loans available to students. And security, which can be an issue in certain areas of the big cities, is by far a less concerning issue than it is elsewhere. In contrast, Mexico has much more great artists who perform at the top of their crafts (reggaeton singers, actors, or even poets) but the overall citizen would rather go to the US in pursue of a greater level of welfare.
As a conclusion, even though it can be argued that a nation is great because of the achievements of a privileged few, the best indication of a nation's greatness is, without doubts, the general welfare of its citizens. However, as was the case of the great powers of the ancient world, this depends on what makes a nation great. In today's society, this definition is closer to a high level of welfare (as seen in the case of equal access to opportunities) than to that nation's influence on the culture of others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...influenced by greek and roman cultures. However the general welfare of the citizens of ...
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Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...rivileged few, the best indication of a nations greatness is, without doubts, the gener...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, second, so, while, as to, for example, in contrast, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73434535104 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68665729795 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462998102467 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2358437771 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.75 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.35 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210650089048 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660071105805 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539007080426 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143613609769 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483025966048 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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