Government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive because it is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
In this statement the speaker considers three points. 1) the survival of cities and cultural traditions is the proper function of government.2) for protection of two cases mentioned the support of government is needed.3) cultural traditions are primarily survived in big cities. I agree with this statement to some extent.
According to the first claim, I believe that subsidizing cultural traditions can be one of the duties of government but it is not the important one. The state budget must be used for more vital services that public need. In my experience, the function of government is more satisfying and commendable for people if it tries to use its budget for renovation of public services, such as transportation, medical services, road safety and schools. Also, many people believe that preservation of cultural traditions is a marginal duty of government, and in addition to this state cannot play an evenhanded role as cultural patron. This is because most of the time legislators do not have enough knowledge about cultural traditions and the ways of protection of them, and they may choose a way that is not acceptable for general populace. Also, officials may make act in favor of the cultural agendas of their own home town. This means they may make a decision based on their prejudice. It is also possible that they are tempted to decide in favor of lobbyists with the most money and influence. So, I believe that it would be better this duty not to relegate exclusively to government.
However, the financial support of government for survival of cultural traditions is necessary especially in the third world countries. In many first world countries, this part is supported by private sectors. For example, one of the social responsibilities of big companies, such as Microsoft is to spend money on the promotion of cultural centers. But how many of such companies can be found in poor countries? As a result, I believe that the only role that government should have is to support traditions financially. This budget can be collected with providing facilities for native people to show traditions to tourists and earn money in favor of conservation of such traditions. The main point that should be considered is that the protection of cultural traditions and the survival of cities is the responsibility of both government and people and they complement each other.
The speaker believes that the cities are the main center of survival of cultural traditions. I completely disagree with this point of view. Nowadays cities have lost their traditional façade, and they have become more modern without any trace of tradition. So, they cannot be a main center of cultural protection. We can see that most folk art, crafts, traditional songs, customs and ceremonies burgeon more in small towns or rural areas. Therefore, it would be more rational such regions to be supported with aim of protection cultural traditions instead of big cities.
In conclusion, in my view, government must interfere financially in realm of cultural protection and assisting small towns and rural regions would be the priority in this subject, as they have influential impact on cultural customs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, third, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2675.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11472275335 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93434201643 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443594646272 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.9 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2204543247 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.884615385 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1153846154 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03846153846 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254882687004 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734551627222 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615263480981 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160165156489 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014581978153 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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