“Governments are justified in circumventing civil laws when doing so is vital to
the protection of national security.”
Respecting civil laws is a obligation of both the population and the government to ensure that there is a harmonious living in community. Goverments, in specific, should respect the laws even when national security is endangered, unless there is approval from population to bypass the current rules. This cenario is important considering that these rules were made in a democratic process and not respecting them could lead to a loss of the democracy stabilished in so many countries.
There are certainly some occasions when circumventing civil laws for national security could be important. For instance, there could a certain rule which says that the country should be open for any person from another place. However, in one occasion, there could be a dissease spreading accross different locations in the globe, and the government decides that closing the borders temporarily would be necessary to ensure the integrity of its citizens. Even if this is agaisnt the stabilished laws, if the population agrees with that, it should be a valid reason to not follow the rules.
On the other hand, defining what is vital or not can be challenging. How to know if a circunstance is crucial? This opens the possibility of the government affirming that acting on something is vital for national security so it can act agaisnt the laws in a non democratic process. If this was possible, any action from the goverment could be explained with this argument. Given the case of recent protests in Hong Kong and Chile, for example, the government could explain that killing protestors would be necessary the national security, which could only benefit the governemnt by shutting down prostests while not addressing the issues related to it. This would be agaisnt democracy.
Therefore, the process of bypassing civil rules should either pass through the validation process such voting of the population via polls. This would ensure that, while Governments can indeed not follow civil laws in crucial moments related to national security, they would not act freely just for their own good.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Respecting civil laws is a obligation of both the population and t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19822485207 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7690916872 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514792899408 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3163708208 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.133333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164316354274 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608004228078 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644627634627 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110405567369 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184517978889 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.