The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp. Human Resources Manager: “Tobor Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick days. Tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers receive the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. In addition, the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule confidential counseling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by employees declined by 10 percent. Diord Corp. has had an increase in employee sick days over the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counseling program. These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity.”
The email states that Diord Corp should apply the same inniatives that Tobor Technologies did to tackle its increasal in sick days from empoyers related to mental health. Given the arguments from the text, however, it is not clear that these actions will increase employee's productivty and reduce sick days. Still, mental health is an important issue in companies and even if the results in terms of productivity were not true, it could still be a viable action to increase the life quality of employees.
According to the email, by tackling mental health problems by complementing the company's insurance plan adding extra coverage for mental illness, Tobor Technologies saw a decrease in the percentage of sick days that the employees took. Specificaly the text claims 10 percentage decline in the number of sick days. However, the text does not specify where the 15 percentage initial employee sick days originaly came from. It could have been an one year period, or one month, or 1 week. With a shorter period, this opens up margin for variations in the size of the population. Also, there is not confidence interval in the measure. Therefore, the 10 percentage decrease could be inside this interval margin, with no stastiticaly difference between the sick days taken before and after the measures from Tobor Technologies.
Also, Diord does not state the reason of the absense of its employees. The sick days from Diord could be related to anything other than mental health, and the increase in the employees absense could be in any area, such as physicial insuries in workplace. Also, even if the sick days where actually related to mental health, Tobor Technlogies is a completely different company from Diord Comp and, while if the innitives that Tobor did worked in their company might be an indicative that it might work on Diord, it does not automatically mean that they will actually work.
With all of this in mind, the text does not give sufficient arguments to claim that the actions will certainly improve employee's productivity at Diord. Still, it might be a good moment for Diord to invest on its employee's mental health.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1745 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.604 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.575 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...originaly came from. It could have been an one year period, or one month, or 1 wee...
^^
Line 9, column 437, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
..., while if the innitives that Tobor did worked in their company might be an indicative...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01675977654 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63813765644 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9572095068 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.733333333 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344654607093 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118093645419 0.0743258471296 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927351703016 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222713769115 0.128457276422 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353500894707 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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