The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp. Human Resources Manager: “Tobor Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick days. Tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers receive the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. In addition, the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule confidential counseling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by employees declined by 10 percent. Diord Corp. has had an increase in employee sick days over the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counseling program. These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity.”
This argument is about introduce a similar insurance plan for workers.However, it seems from authors line of thought is we introduce new plan and them he is sure about that reduce employee absenteeism and cause. He has not provide any logics for his assumptions. He should have gone in details of tobor technologies.The authors argument is considered as. uncompleted.
There are many loopholes in this arguments as the authors is talking about his assumptions.This argument readily assume that tabor technology is responsible for employee sick days. The author is assuming that if they introduce a similar insurance plan then reduce employee sick days.
However, All are just assumptions,First of all,The author has not considered the probability that tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers receive the same coverage for mental illness. Hence, This arguments clam fails to prove that employee's illness behind reasons.
Second, The author has not explained about what kind of system they created for employee at onsite.Hence, This arguments hold base only if employees feel good with the system.
Further,The author has talked about that increase in employee sick days over past two years. he has not provide any evidence to support his point of view.however, it might be possible that employee have other problems. Therefore, one can not accept this conclusion without any evidence.
In short,The authors argument is unpersuasive as it stand. To bolster further, However the author is must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a detailed analysis of tobor technologies disadvantage.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1328 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.108 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.629 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.16 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.706 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ce a similar insurance plan for workers.However, it seems from authors line of thought ...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...loyee absenteeism and cause. He has not provide any logics for his assumptions. He shou...
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Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...e gone in details of tobor technologies.The authors argument is considered as. unco...
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Line 1, column 321, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ne in details of tobor technologies.The authors argument is considered as. uncompleted....
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...mpleted. There are many loopholes in this arguments as the authors is talking abo...
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Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...uthors is talking about his assumptions.This argument readily assume that tabor tech...
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Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , First
...ys. However, All are just assumptions,First of all,The author has not considered th...
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Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...r, All are just assumptions,First of all,The author has not considered the probabili...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...This arguments clam fails to prove that employees illness behind reasons. Second, The...
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Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...tem they created for employee at onsite.Hence, This arguments hold base only if emplo...
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Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...y created for employee at onsite.Hence, This arguments hold base only if employees f...
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Line 9, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...es feel good with the system. Further,The author has talked about that increase i...
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Line 9, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...employee sick days over past two years. he has not provide any evidence to support...
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Line 9, column 105, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...ck days over past two years. he has not provide any evidence to support his point of vi...
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Line 11, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...lusion without any evidence. In short,The authors argument is unpersuasive as it ...
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Line 11, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n without any evidence. In short,The authors argument is unpersuasive as it stand. T...
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Line 11, column 53, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stands'?
Suggestion: stands
... authors argument is unpersuasive as it stand. To bolster further, However the author...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, in short, kind of, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 252.0 441.139720559 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46825396825 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04326532606 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.76136181 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226872192272 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814106033431 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556329710643 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123356929534 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054484341886 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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