Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.
This argument is about weather and local news are brodcast in our late-night news program rather then national news. However, It seems from the authors line of thought is if we increased time to weather and local news then they increase their markets. He has not provided any logics for his reasons. he should have gone in details of local businesses. Hence, This argument can be considered as unsubstantiated.
There are many loopholes as author is talking on basis of his assumptions. However, This argument readily assume that they loss in their business just because they shows some national news in late-night program. The authors also assuming that they loose advertising contracts just because this.
However, All those are just assumptions, First of all, there are many more reasons to connected with them, and canceled their advertising contracts not because of national news. Hence, This arguments claim fails to prove that national news does not reasons behide this.
Second, The author does not explained that they increased time to national news rather then weather and local news. Hence, This argument has holds base only if they describe a detailed explanations.
Further, The author has talked about that in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues. However, he has not provide any evidence to support his view point. Therefore, one can not accepted his conclusion whithout any evidence.
In short, The authors argument is unpersuasive as it stand. To bolster further, He should have provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a detailed analysis of why increase time to national news in late-night news program. The author should have also emphosized on the detailed analysis of local businesses.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 287 350
No. of Characters: 1452 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.116 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.524 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.163 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...t in our late-night news program rather then national news. However, It seems from t...
^^^^
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ot provided any logics for his reasons. he should have gone in details of local bu...
^^
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
...oss in their business just because they shows some national news in late-night progra...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'reason'
Suggestion: reason
...ls to prove that national news does not reasons behide this. Second, The author does...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'explain'
Suggestion: explain
...de this. Second, The author does not explained that they increased time to national ne...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
... increased time to national news rather then weather and local news. Hence, This arg...
^^^^
Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'explanation'?
Suggestion: explanation
...s base only if they describe a detailed explanations. Further, The author has talked abou...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...vertising revenues. However, he has not provide any evidence to support his view point....
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 236, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'accept'
Suggestion: accept
... his view point. Therefore, one can not accepted his conclusion whithout any evidence. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 15, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...whithout any evidence. In short, The authors argument is unpersuasive as it stand. T...
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Line 11, column 54, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stands'?
Suggestion: stands
... authors argument is unpersuasive as it stand. To bolster further, He should have pro...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 96, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...and. To bolster further, He should have provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...perhaps by way of a detailed analysis of why increase time to national news in la...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, in short, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 287.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24738675958 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62919635198 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480836236934 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5518490773 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6666666667 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9444444444 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307876721485 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981838990295 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12262017305 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175826669317 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103477355861 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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