The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
Over the past year, our late night news programme has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaint received from viewers were concerned with our stations coverage of weather and local news. In addition, locla businesses that use to advertise during our late night news have just cancelled their advertising contract with us. Therefore, in other to attract more viewers to the prograame a nd to avoid loosing any further advertising revenue, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Television station provide satisfactions for the customers. The conclusion need to be analysed painstakingly based on the following points below before it can be sanctioned.
When the author was laying down challenges encountered via the memorandum gotten from business manager of a television station, he made mention of the statement over the past year. The author was vagued in his analysis in that he failed to explain in details to us how he arrived at its conclusion of devoted increased -even though he still failed to explained the precise year he carried out his analysis. How many time did he carried out his analysis? And also how did he arrived at his final conclusion.
Moresore, the author also made mention of complains received during this time period, there is possiblity the complains are either positive or negative. The complain might also be another aspect in the station they failed to address.It can be an advice from their customers as well the author failed to mention. Judging or making a final conclusion based on the author vague statement is really dangerous. Complains received need to be stated for proper analysis before conclusion can be proposed.
Before the television station can resotor time devoted to weather and local news to its former level, one need to consider the reason a local businessl late-night advertiser withdrew from the station. The author just paraphrased on that, he failed to deeg deep. What if their are other reasons why the loacla business advertiser withdrew. What if the time spent is those who are handling the programme are the main bone of contention. It might be those who handle night programmes who failed to accomplish their mission to the customer taste. They radio station need to dig deep by asking the man who leave to know if really is based on the time spent like the author stated. Their is possibility the withdrawal business goes down inwhich he or she is impecunious for the main time.
Lastly, concluding based on an individual withdrawal is really bad. Are there more people who withdaw based on that ? What statistical analysis was carried out ? If not it is even much more detrimental restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its formal level if the main source of problem is not tackled.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1867 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.459 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hallenges encountered via the memorandum gotten from business manager of a televi...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...e year he carried out his analysis. How many time did he carried out his analysis? And al...
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Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...plains are either positive or negative. The complain might also be another aspect in the sta...
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Line 9, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ins are either positive or negative. The complain might also be another aspect in...
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Line 9, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...t in the station they failed to address.It can be an advice from their customers a...
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Line 9, column 245, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...tation they failed to address.It can be an advice from their customers as well the author...
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Line 9, column 350, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on. Judging or making a final conclusion based on the author vague statement is ...
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Line 9, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a final conclusion based on the author vague statement is really dangerous. Com...
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Line 15, column 271, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...n that, he failed to deeg deep. What if their are other reasons why the loacla busine...
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Line 15, column 362, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ertiser withdrew. What if the time spent is those who are handling the programme ...
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Line 15, column 678, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
... the time spent like the author stated. Their is possibility the withdrawal business ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, really, so, still, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0025974026 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66524660224 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.4735545099 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7142857143 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95238095238 5.70786347227 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240415737527 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665461065597 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806880777739 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118875575873 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672585913812 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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