People most respect the powerful not when they exercise their power, but when they refrain from exercising it.
Respecting something happens when there is a feeling of appreciating in the powerful. Once it exercises its power over something, specially if it is not expected and not compatible to the action required at the moment, it leads to reduction of the respect of others towards it. While it might have been true that the powerful was respected in the past once they exercised their power, there is evidence that it is not like anymore. In this new scenario, not showing their power is more respected.
There could be some that argue that the respect come from showing off how powerful you are. For instance, wars until before the 20th century were mostly countries showing off others how more powerful they were, by attacking enemies, conquering lands and robbing the citizens from this new land. However, taking a deeper look at more recent times - such as the Second World War, when in Germany the nazists showed their power by killing millions of people and in USA where they throwed nuclear bombs in Japan to also show how much more powerful they were - did not create a feeling of respect. Actually, these moments are claimed as a moment of shame by those two countries, with their own citizens not being proud of it. This can be seen in the holocaust memorial in Germany and in policies agaisnt nuclear war by USA.
On the other hand, the powerful who do not exercise their power are seen as more respectful nowadays. Google, a company created only in the end of the 20th century, is a showcase for this, being one of the most powerful companies in the world by having billion of users worldwide. Their motto is "don't be evil". This is aligned with the concept of not showcasing their power to other people, which can also be seen when they do not explicitely attack other rival companies, and actually create a better product instead of eating the competition. With this in mind, there is no doubt that, even if Google does not usually exercise its power, it is for sure one of the most respected companies in the globe, being a childposter of a good company. Therefore, even without showing their power, this company was able to attain respect from people from all conners from the world.
In conclusion, by being the powerful and showing it does not make something respectful, it can actually bring shame in future by looking how unmeasurable the showcase of power was. Instead, being powerful and acting in a good will without exercising power brings admiration and respect from people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81062355658 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46920523676 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501154734411 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8027616994 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.529411765 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4705882353 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.459616150626 0.243740707755 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158420202431 0.0831039109588 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901473901119 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314516337042 0.150359130593 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756359534532 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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