People most respect the powerful not when they exercise their power, but when they refrain from exercising it.
Write an essay in which you develop and support a position on the statement above.In writing your essay,you should consider both when the statement may be true and when it may be false
As quipped by Winston Churchill: “Speak softly and carry a big stick”, yet how this stick is used defines ones character and their perception by those who bear witness to power. do those who exercise their power command great respect than those who show restraint? some would argue that those who see a problem and act upon it deserve our admiration, while others believe that there is more probity to be found in those who refrain. I believe that those who resist the urge to overcome a problem with force are more deserving of our respect. After all, swinging a stick is a simple answer that may birth new conflicts, but showing mercy or magnanimity may resolve more than just the conflict seen on the surface.
those who believe that the proclivity to use power is a trait deserving reverence might make the general claim that inactivity leads to loss or that history is written by the victors. while these notions may ring true, they do not consider the implications of power misused. Perhaps those who flaunt their might have the respect of some, but many moral philosophers would argue that their actions are undeserving of admiration based on an objective human code. Take for example Nazi Germany: this regime committed horrendous acts, but if they had been successful in their advancements, many others would have looked upon Adolf Hitler as a man of great insight and worth, simply based on this position as a force and as a victor.
Conversely, a highly respected individual, John F kennedy is looked upon in a light of great admiration for his cool-headed leadership during the Cuban Missile Crisis. this event had the makings of a tragedy, but the young president refrained from use of gross force which had the potential to launch the world into massive turmoil. By looking beyond the ego of a nation, kennedy was able to prevent disaster and by doing so earned the respect of many.
Ultimately, the human experience has shown us that a barbaric use of power is an easier decision that is not nearly has effective on the whole and which does not command as much respect as intelligently refraining from that use of power. The presented examples suggest that a cool head in dire circumstances is what gains respect for a person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, if, look, may, so, while, after all, for example, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84278350515 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59604921306 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564432989691 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5884914393 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.214285714 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134992526637 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491428655498 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411526004716 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0859074834696 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323649875213 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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