Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Art forms such as dance, music and drama form the cultural backbone of many countries. Military on the other hand provides a sense of security for a nation against enemy countries. Governments should invest as much in arts as they do in the military. I agree with such a statement, since art forms an important part of our heritage, and if due attention is not given, certain art forms may be lost into oblivion. The reasoning behind my position will be explained in brief in the paragraphs below.
As stated in the earlier passage, certain art forms personify a particular cultural heritage. Not paying due attention towards art leads to the extinction of an art form. A country such as India, which is home to a diverse number of cultures, have a plethora of art forms which are evident in the rural regions of India. Art in the form of clothes, wall paintings or folk dance are reminiscent of the past Indian culture. Many art forms also serve as a means to earn money for the people residing in the rural states of India. Hence, it is the government's duty to look into ways of preserving such forms of art.
Moreover, the governments can start educational courses for people who possess a penchant for art. Such courses would amplify their knowledge of art. Additionally, such courses can help nurture a new artist of the current generation. Governments can also extend financial support in the form of scholarships for those who do not have the adequate financial backing to pursue a career in art. Employing such measures would help an individual get profound knowledge about various forms of art.
On the contrary, people who are of the opinion that the importance of investing in military supersedes the importance of investing in art are not entirely wrong. We all would want our borders to be safe and prevent enemy infiltration into our country. Perhaps, I can contradict by stating that armies belonging to developed countries already have essential financial backing. Moreover, we are not going into a state of war every alternate year. Therefore, if art gets an investment on par with military, it would not harm the military in any way.
In sum, I am a strong proponent of the statement that governments should invest as much in arts as they do in the military. In my opinion, even if investment on par with military is not feasible, at-least a certain amount of importance should be given to art, in order to preserve it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, in brief, such as, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79196217494 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72647047971 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494089834515 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9737013863 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.1304347826 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20717547149 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696373364093 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064831742538 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131175498681 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447518973844 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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