Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Governments provide fundings to fields such as research, art, entertainment, military, etc. Although investing in each field has its own merits, it is important that the government prioritizes the ones that are more essential than others. When looking at the recommendation that "governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military", we should evaluate whether it is a valid and a well-thought one. After considering both sides of the position and with strong reasonings, I disagree with the recommendation and believe that government should instead invest more in the military than they do in the arts.
Some may argue that the arts of a society shapes its culture and is needed to be conserved. While it is true that government should invest in the arts, it shouldn't be allocating equal amounts of funding to the military and the arts. Military should receive more investment since it supersedes the importance of arts in a way that it protects the country. During crisis, if the government doesn't have a strong military base, the country will be in danger. For example, if a country is wanting in military forces and war equipments, the people will be in danger when the country is suffering from attacks. In the case that a country is well-quipped with a full army, guns, bombs, tanks, and shelters, it is prepared for any emergency that it may encounter. With that being said, the military is more essential for governments to prioritize in order to protect the country and its people.
In addition, governments should spend more money in the military simple because military equipments, items, and anything related to guns and special forces are expensive. One aircraft from the air force may cost over five times more than an art piece. Considering that, it is natural for the government to allocate more of its investments into areas that require more expenditures.
All in all, it would be more advantageous for the governments to invest more of its fundings in the military than in the arts for the safety of its people and the cost of being prepared with a strong military force. Despite some preservations of the arts may be costly, it is not anymore when being compared to the equipments needed to protect its people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: argues
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Suggestion: shouldn't
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Suggestion: doesn't
...untry. During crisis, if the government doesnt have a strong military base, the countr...
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...be in danger. For example, if a country is wanting in military forces and war equipments, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94502617801 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91509396302 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458115183246 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7188887205 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0625 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20525355789 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815214881955 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059484217131 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141497331418 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624115867856 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.