Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
School is where students go to acquire knowledge and skills they need to succeed. Most schools provide basic academic studies such as English, Writing, Math, and Foreign Language classes. Some schools go beyond that and offer after school programs to support students with areas of passion including Sports, Music, and Art. However besides the classes and programs mentioned above, there are crucial skills that students need once they go off to college and work in the real world. Therefore, schools should provide more learning opportunities for students to take part in to better prepare them for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
One important skill a person needs throughout their adulthood is public speaking. This skill is needed when presenting ideas or proposals to others and speaking in front of a group of people. Although some may argue that this skill could be obtained outside of school, having the environment to learn and practice makes a huge difference in improving one’s public speaking skills. For example, a student can find videos online and practice speaking in front of the mirror. However, this doesn’t give the student real life experiences and feedback from others. If schools are able to provide a class or program that provides students with professional guidance and space to practice, students will be more confident and equipped for future presentations or public speaking opportunities.
Another skill that is beneficial for one to have during their adulthood is the ability to manage stress. This skill is needed in every stage of adulthood. Schools should teach students how to identify and tackle stress to prepare them for their future, especially in college and work life. A lot of students enter college with no prior stress management knowledge and struggle to do well in classes. If they learned the ways to deal with stress, it would be much easier for them to succeed.
Schools should offer opportunities for students outside of the academic fields to learn important skills such as public speaking and stress management in order to set them up for success in adulthood. Students will be more prepared for the real world and move through obstacles with strategies and experiences obtained in school.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21703296703 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62001362215 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516483516484 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3143001984 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.5 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415580932158 0.243740707755 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132084959017 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133399124246 0.0758088955206 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279844749972 0.150359130593 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100119468373 0.0667264976115 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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