Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
In modern global society, we see that people are becoming more and more creative with their goals in life. This leads to the younger generation wanting to seek fame and recognition rather than pursuing long-term goals. Although there are merits in obtaining immediate fame and recognition, I agree with the statement that young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term goals due to several reasons.
First of all, immediate fame and recognition can lead to complacency and prevent one from working hard. With today’s technology, it is possible for one to share a random video on the internet and wake up with thousands of followers the next morning. Having this in mind, many young people are trying to hop on the bandwagon and gain followings this way. However, this can send the wrong message to the younger generation that success does not require effort. For example, young people who became famous from posting content on TikTok or YouTube overnight were able to gain early success and affluence without having to work hard. After gaining fame and wealth, some become too comfortable and do not feel the need to seek new challenges. Examples like these are not great role models for the younger generations to look up to.
Secondly, people may find shortcuts in order to gain recognition from others. Nevertheless, there could be harmful consequences in the long run. The most common example for this is researchers faking data to achieve the outcome they desire. This would lead to numerous complications if their research results are used in areas that have influence on other people’s lives. Despite the researcher gaining short-term fame, they will soon be disputed with the malpractice and reprimanded for any consequences the false research have caused. Therefore, it is important to educate young people that short-term recognition does not guarantee a secure status later in life. Instead, focusing on long-term goals will bring more fruitful achievements that will last.
Moreover, teaching young people to set long-term goals with smaller sub-goals will help them learn how to plan ahead, allowing them to form good habits in many areas when they grow up to be an adult. If they are taught how to set goals with incremental timelines and steps to achieve them, they will be able to apply that skill later in their career. People who are apt in setting realistic goals and creating plans are more likely to succeed in the future.
All in all, encouraging young people to focus on achieving long-term and realistic goals instead of short-term fame and recognition is more beneficial. It is crucial for people to not feel complacent with early success and seek shortcuts to achieve desired results. More importantly, it is more advantageous that young people learn how to set goals and plans to become successful throughout their lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11914893617 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6381983509 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514893617021 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.088952914 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.608695652 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4347826087 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417490662169 0.243740707755 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115810999325 0.0831039109588 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116591479903 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259450939868 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144354208818 0.0667264976115 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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