Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Art in itself is an all encompassing industry. Encouraging and promoting art should be the underlying motive of all governmental economic policies. If not more, an equal amount should be invested in both art and military. Even though military is the backbone of any country, investment in art has multiple benefits.
Galleries, museums, theatre plays and opera shows constitute of art in various forms. These build the sources of aesthetic pleasure as well as recreation for the general public. Having such institutes in place will give a sense of belonging to the people of the nation and be close to one another while bonding over art. Since art has no barrier, these can be constituted as public goods as well. The importance of such public goods cannot be immediately estimated but are beneficial in the long run.
Only the government will be able to fund such activities as a huge capital expenditure is required at the initial stages. Later on, the public can be charged a nominal fee for the maintenance of such facilities. Thus, investing in art is a good source of revenue for the government. Curation of art pieces as well as performing arts will not only boost the morale of artists but will also engage them in gainful employment necessary for survival. The money thus spent will be coming back to the economy in terms of expenditure on goods and services and through taxation of people earning above a certain pre-specified amount.
One can argue that military spending by the government is vital to maintain peace, harmony and national security. However, opening up the defence sector to private players is a much needed step to maintain an equilibrium where national income is concerned. Disinvestment by the government sector for the military is the need of the hour if it is fully funded by the government. Private players will ensure that superior quality products are manufactured at competitive rates.
Therefore, government spending in arts is required to preserve culture and heritage. This will ensure that tourists can indulge in art experiences and give back to the economy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... pleasure as well as recreation for the general public. Having such institutes in place will g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 33.0505617978 27% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05157593123 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83247061691 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558739255014 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8615756045 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.15 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.45 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113764349957 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406629576239 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030192919913 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681264331144 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247021456858 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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