Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In the world where we are living is full of people that are inspired by many natural and artificial beauties. In parallel, many people get that beauty available in their countries and other travel outside to enjoy it. However, government can help promoting the art and there are constraints of budget inherent. Therefore, government should consider the budget constraint before giving the art equal priority l safety.
Art can prove to develop reputation of a country. In this wold, a large sector consists of those people who are spellbound to art and they visit different parts of world to indulge themselves by aesthetics inherent in art. When government will be engaged in promoting art, the artists of country can show their skills to the world and attract them towards their country. The country's tag on the piece of art can help developing in recognition in international art market. Consequently, when alien people will start visiting the country, it will definitely help in generating revenue from tourism.
There are many talented people dwelling in country but because of lack of resources, they are unable to showcase their skills. For example, in rural area of Pakistan, there are women who are innovative at hand work of clothes and they do not have enough money to show their skill to the other countries or even outside their territories. The government can help them by investing a platform that helps those women to come forward and show their skills to the world. As a result, the government will be able to attract outsiders and utilize the talents of citizens efficiently.
Sometimes, people loving art do not find them widely available in their territories and therefore go somewhere else to see it. It provides the government an opportunity to invest in opening exhibition centers where people can come and enjoy the aesthetics of art. There might be some people who love that so much that they purchases them on first sight. In this way, the government will be able to develop an environment where citizens can see the artificial beauty without travelling outside.
A very big hurdle that comes in all opportunities is the budget constraint. Undoubtedly, the safety should be the first priority of any country for its smooth running. Considering the 50 50 investment in military and art may result in devoid investment in proper safety of the country. Therefore, in order for government to invest in art, it should first prioritize the safety of the country.
Therefore, it can be concluded that, only if the military department is stable and there is no threat to the security of country with low budget, then government should invest in opportunities provided by art.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to promote' or 'promote'.
Suggestion: to promote; promote
... enjoy it. However, government can help promoting the art and there are constraints of bu...
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Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...untrys tag on the piece of art can help developing in recognition in international art mar...
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Line 4, column 323, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'purchase'
Suggestion: purchase
... people who love that so much that they purchases them on first sight. In this way, the g...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: 50
...for its smooth running. Considering the 50 50 investment in military and art may resu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01113585746 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76429039401 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476614699332 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5486736458 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.272727273 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4090909091 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136773722245 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494781785396 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345028437653 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831665676157 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187203905796 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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