Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The topic raises the controversial issue of whether arts should get the same amount of invesment from the government as military do. Indisputablly,

arts is the scale on which the cultural resourses of nation is measured. Nevertheless, the security of a country is the single important issue that

should get the lion's share of a country's budget as what need of art if there is no nation exist. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that art

should get same amount of invesment and would argue that military should get the highest portion of budget.

First of all, military is related with the primary concern of a country which is the security of the country. I would like to point out that their training, arms

cost a lot. To illustrate, they will perform as efficiently as they are trained. They will fight as fiercely as their weapon's quality. In this circumstance,

obviously a country would want to have their security to be most efficient and deadly. Consequently, it is obvious that the more a country will spend

in military, the more this section will act with efficacy.

Furthermore, investing in any other section other than military with the same amount of money will eventuially decrease invesment in military section.

Specifically, if that section is just related to the abstruct aspects of a country. Both common sense and personal experience have told us that that

invesmentwwould be considered

Admittedly, great intances of arts always remain in history as a relic of a nation. This is true specially when, the nation's art has contributed to the total

scope of world's art resources. In addition, additional budget in arts will definitely help this section to bloom and be remarkable. However, I would still

argue that arts don't deserve the same amount of budget as military do. Because, military are concerned with more serious and important an issue.

In conclusion, although arts also needs some increased amount of invesment, it should not be equal to military. As long as some measurements are

performed and some areas are involved i would argue in favor of military getting greater amount than any oither section.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13407821229 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80243198721 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491620111732 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4511315933 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7368421053 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.97078651685 322% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124392606428 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435959215015 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326628543249 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0455472676855 0.150359130593 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318051249276 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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