The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents i

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The author concludes here that restricting the number of mopeds rented by moped rental companies by 50 percent can reduce the number accidents by 50 percent. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention some key factors, on the basis of which it could have been evaluated. To support his claim he reasons that Seaville, a neighboring island, had achieved the same percent of success by implying the same rule. However, careful scrutiny of other evidences would prove that there is little credible support for author's claim. Hence, the argument fails to convice reader about the result it predictrs.

Firstly, the argument readily assumes that, Seaville and Balmer island would produce the same result for the same restriction. This is merely just an assumption without much solid ground. For example, there could be a town with vast number of rats where some particular poison can work to minimize the number of rats where in other town the poison may not work for the rats because of the altitude and location factor attributing to the poison. Hence, a solution working for a particular place does not necessarily will produce the same result for another place.

Again, the author points out to the face that, the rule hinders the companies to rent more than 25 moped per day to reduce the number of accidents in half. But what if the number of compnaies gets doubled? The number of moped will still be the same. So, it doesn't lend sufficient support to draw a clear correlation among the number of moped and number of accidents. As a result, the arguments is not convincing to the read.

The conclusion here raises some questions that need to be answered. Can't people rent mopeds personally? Are the drivers of mopeds tained enough? Are the road signals in effect? Do the the traffic police do their job with responsibility?

Personal reantal can increase the number of mopeds, but does that actually increase the number of accidents? Without answering there questions, the reader is left with the assumption that this just some wishful thinking by the author.

In conclusion, it can be said that author fails to provide credible support to his argument and fails to convince the reader about the conclusion he predicted.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, still, for example, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97877984085 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50313848689 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509283819629 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.579939505 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3181818182 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1363636364 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138707433608 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384273672216 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448688836894 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681212383214 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410563331469 0.0628817314937 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1809 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.773 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.419 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.227 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.553 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5