An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author claims here that a new breed of millet high in vitamin A would combat the deficiency of vitamin A in Tagus. Stated in this way
, the argument fails mention some key points, on the basis of which it could have been evaluated. To support his claim, the author reasons that as millet is already a staple food in Tagus, new breed with high percentage vitamin A will be easily adapted.
However, careful scrutiny of evidence proves it has little credible support to the author's claim. Hence, the argument can be considered as incomplete and unsustainable.
Firstly, the argument readily assumes that people will buy the new breed of millet just because they are habituated with other breeds of millet. This is merely an assumption with any solid ground. Because, most of the time people try to buy a breed that is less costly and more tasty. They may not careful enough to consider the nutritious virtue of that breed. Hence, this claim fails to convince reader about it's efficiency.
Again, the author points out to fact that farmers will have the ability to buy costly seeds just because they will be told that it will pay them more. Most of the farmers are poor and they will not take the risk of using a new costly breed when they are already getting profit from which breed they are using. So this claim again proves to be weak and unable to draw a clear correlation between convincing farmers and combat vitamin A deficiency.
Finally, there could have been other measures taken with the same amount of effort author has mentioned in the argument. By careful testing of the evidences, the author fails to answer several skeptical question. Do people have the ability to buy new breed? Do all class of people are stable buyers of millet? Do the farmers are rich enough to take the risk of planting new breed's seeds? Aren't there any easier way of fighting the deficiency? By answering these questions, the author could have made his claim credible, because it would have justified the measure is the best way and it is doable in Tagus. But without answering them, reader is left with the assumption that, the argument is just a wishful thought of the author.
In conclusion, the argument would have been
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1785 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.589 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.228 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.74 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.391 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author claims here that a new breed of millet high in vitamin A ...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...itamin A in Tagus. Stated in this way , the argument fails mention some key poi...
^
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s little credible support to the authors claim. Hence, the argument can be consi...
^^
Line 19, column 311, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... of people are stable buyers of millet? Do the farmers are rich enough to take the...
^^
Line 19, column 389, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Aren't
... the risk of planting new breeds seeds? Arent there any easier way of fighting the de...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77577319588 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32833938246 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479381443299 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.607918275 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2272727273 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27272727273 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305341449136 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091281869595 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956215616277 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160635822555 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114886402365 0.0628817314937 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.3550499002 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.