Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The prosperity of a country depends not only its military power but also its cultural and artistic buity.The author claims that the governments should invest equal amount of money for both of its military and arts.I am mostly agree with the claim of the author.To establish my position the following three recommendation can be consider.

First of all, The art of a country represents its cultural heritage and reflect the poeple of a country .The development of arts is in other words the development of the culture to enreached the strong cultural peturn of the countery .On the otherhand the military development a only necessary for the protection of a country from the attack of the allience and to spreed power .if we can develop arts and can exchange the important elements with the other countries than this could build a better relationship between the allien country.For example if we concider the period of 2nd world war whem the Turkies culture were totally different from those of the european and they were in a grear throuble ,but their leader Kamal passa amalgame the culture with the europeans and thus lead the county with lots of prosperity.

Secondly,military power can only spreed the violence and fear with other wile art can recoicilate friendship.Since military developmnt is an rudementry part for the existace of the country so we can not deny its development but artistics development is also require as military development.if we emphacise both with similar importance than thos can bring a great prosperity to any country.For example the european had a great difficulty during the 18 and 19 century but their emparior continueing to support to their art and cultiral heritage and thus we have some of the best artistic gifts of the world heriatge on that period.

Finally,military development is an of the fundamental requrirement of any nation.Since with the development of the technology the diversity and animoisaty nbetween the countries are increased and with the development of the nulcear power the world are now in its mostly dangerous position so military development is now the most argee to any nation.It is necessary ro every nation to give its extra emphacise to develop its security and also secure its people sequrity so the development of military is very much necessary which can be denied.

In conclusion we can say that though the military development is a fundamental requirement to a country but arts development is also important.so any government should give equal emphasize on both fields.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1175059952 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03288017791 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467625899281 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 83.0 23.0359550562 360% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 217.018340239 60.3974514979 359% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 426.8 118.986275619 359% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 83.4 23.4991977007 355% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 23.0 5.21951772744 441% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139866215454 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896238845094 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.012371840259 0.0758088955206 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896238845094 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.012371840259 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.4 14.1392134831 314% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.23 48.8420337079 -43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.92365168539 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.8 12.1743820225 302% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.6 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.09 8.38706741573 132% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.8971910112 248% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.2 11.2143820225 314% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.7820224719 255% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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