Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In our modern society there is always a question about governmental money distribution arising. The author implies that the authority ought to spend money on the arts at least as much as on the military. Although it is rather controversial issue hence every government should consider themselves what is better in their current situation, I am inclined to think that art expenses dominating military expenses in the long-run will lead to the better furure for all countries in the world.
First of all, there is a famous statement that the politics separates nations, while the art unites. If the people were more culturally abundant there would have been no wars in our world at all as everyone would appreciate the culture of the other nations. By understanding the culture people usually come to understanding what is called mentality. Every nation has got its own mentality and sometimes the differences in the mentalities lead to misunderstanding and, therefore, to wars. Investing much money not in the military but in the arts will help to overcome these differences. For example, there are lot of cultural gallaries and exhibitions that everyone in the world would like to see like Louvre in Paris, State Hermitage Museum in Saint-Petersburg, Art Gallary in Dresden etc. Promoting such places will be beneficial for all humankind as they are not only heritage of the one particular nation, but heritage of the humanity.
Secondly, despite arguing in favor of investing more in the military, it is important to say that sometimes there is a necessity to spend more money in the military. For instance, this is very essential during a war. It would have been quite insensible to invest much money in the arts by the United Kingdom and France or Soviet Union during the World War Two hence it was much more vital to survive and win the war than to have some cultural activities. Even though, there is evidence that the culture and the arts helped people durind war times to fight. For instance, during the blocade of Leningrad when there was almost nothing to eat many members of Mariinsky Theatre gathered to play a simphony that was an indicator of dominance of the arts over the physiological needs. Or the other example is filming patriotic movies in the United States to encourage people to fight against Nazis.
To conclude, there is strong evidence implying adopting the recommendation of the author as the arts and the culture are those thing that push our society to develop and improve and investing money in it will result in the better future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this thing' or 'those things'?
Suggestion: this thing; those things
... author as the arts and the culture are those thing that push our society to develop and im...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'at least', 'for example', 'for instance', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247844827586 0.240241500013 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.157327586207 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.073275862069 0.0880659088768 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0474137931034 0.0497285424764 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0280172413793 0.0444667217837 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135775862069 0.12292977631 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0344827586207 0.0406280797675 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76859206517 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0431034482759 0.030933414821 139% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.116379310345 0.0997080785238 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0215517241379 0.0249443105267 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0129310344828 0.0148568991511 87% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2566.0 2732.02544248 94% => OK
No of words: 432.0 452.878318584 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93981481481 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351851851852 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.259259259259 0.280924506359 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.194444444444 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12962962963 0.132149295362 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76859206517 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 59.0524987498 55.4138127331 107% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 25.4117647059 23.380412469 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4962876609 59.4972553346 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.941176471 141.124799967 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4117647059 23.380412469 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.674092028746 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 51.3376906318 51.4728631049 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.7962962963 1.64882698954 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.486695572093 0.391690518653 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110032281321 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0462198708653 0.077325440228 60% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.553788269131 0.547984918172 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.174079480735 0.149214159877 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.224793472952 0.161403998019 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103347903205 0.0892212321368 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.530853766412 0.385218514788 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0302489213853 0.0692045440612 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.395912182558 0.275328986314 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203183612633 0.0653680567796 31% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.