Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Military plays a pivotal role in the safety and security of a country.People feel safe when they are assured that they have a powerful military to safeguard them.Its one of the important factor in deciding the strength of a nation.On the other hand art adds to the glory of the nation. Therefore both are two different things which are vital for the country.
According to me, government should not invest as much in arts as they do in military. Military is the necessity of a country,its act as a oxygen for a country whereas art adds colors to the nation.Its because of the military of a nation that the people can live happily without any fear. Its an important measure for deciding the strength of a country. Its strength implies how strong the nation is in self-guarding itself.
In addition, government investment in the military is very essential. Proper and pertinent investment is required as it is the concern of nation's security. In fact investment should be proliferated accordingly in order to enhance the strength of the military. Moreover, special incentives should be given to the gallantry soldiers and their families in order to support them. This will also motivate many other people to join military hence aggrandizing the strength of the nation's military.
On the other hand as military is very important, nation also need art,however it does not require investment as much as military do. Government must invest in promoting and bolstering art too but wisely. The government must visualize the need of investment on art and then invest accordingly. Government must invest in art so as to promote it but not at the stake of commuting the investment in military. Overall military needs more investment than the country's art.
At the end I would say,art and military are the important part of country's strength. But the investment in both the fields need to be done judiciously and moreover government should invest more in enhancing our military than art. However proper investment must be done in art according to the requirements and capability of a nation.
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'whereas', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228116710875 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.145888594164 0.157235817809 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0954907161804 0.0880659088768 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0636604774536 0.0497285424764 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0397877984085 0.0444667217837 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135278514589 0.12292977631 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0424403183024 0.0406280797675 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89648330516 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0291777188329 0.030933414821 94% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119363395225 0.0997080785238 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0291777188329 0.0249443105267 117% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0079575596817 0.0148568991511 54% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2089.0 2732.02544248 76% => OK
No of words: 348.0 452.878318584 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.00287356322 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.379310344828 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.313218390805 0.280924506359 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.244252873563 0.200843997647 122% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.158045977011 0.132149295362 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89648330516 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 219.290929204 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456896551724 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.5880138419 55.4138127331 84% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3157894737 23.380412469 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2879077093 59.4972553346 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.947368421 141.124799967 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 23.380412469 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.674092028746 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.21349557522 288% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.6376285541 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.62765957447 1.64882698954 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470703794089 0.391690518653 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.164462654038 0.123202303941 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0947838385666 0.077325440228 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.586022584222 0.547984918172 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146564093708 0.149214159877 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.220850864709 0.161403998019 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789432512603 0.0892212321368 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.498360772253 0.385218514788 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0578580499268 0.0692045440612 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.35364235719 0.275328986314 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203237226829 0.0653680567796 31% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.5995575221 74% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.