GRE essay: Many important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answer to one question that we come across the answer to another.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the st

There are a lot of significant dicoveries are accidental, like the invention of pennicillin,which found by the doctor nearly two hundred years ago. It was the happy accident that the doctor was not intended to find it. While in this story, the key point is the ablity of the doctor could discover this medicine which let the human almost say good bye to the diseases caused by microgerms. Important dicoveries or creantions can improve our technology, hence our world will develop at a rapid speed, while there are some significant times in these discoveries and creations are not the happy accidents, which teem with the efforts by the scientists from beginning to the end.

To begin with, I should say there were lots of important creations invented after wars ironically. We must concede that wars had propeled the development of human beings in various places. Like the pennicillin, was founded by the doctor at war time. After the War I, when the tanks was invented to drive to the battle field, the tractor was after the trace of tank several years later. It is the human nature to evolve by the pressure outside, and the war was the most violant one.Hence we can see more discoveries after wars. It's very sympathatic to say so despite it is true. While in the future, we all do not want to see these socalled happy accidents.

On the other hand, we do have other methods instead of wars to make many inventions, most of them are accidentall. It has significant meaning for a country to research and invent rockets which used to explore our Earth and outerspace. At the same time , there are lots of invetions comes by the way of reasearching. For example, the fridge was an accidental invetion when the engineers was inventing rockets.More over, there are various kinds of vegetables' seeds were under the cosmic ray in the satellite after the scientists found these seeds have lot of merits compared with the ones on the ground.

You may think our human beings are lucky dogs hence so many important discoveries were found accidentally. To me these happy accidents are not only the happy ending of the scientists but they are also telling us we must try to make progress to gain these success instead of just stopping by and enjoy the fruit presently . If the doctor was not trying his best to sovle the contagious disease, he could hardly found penicillin for ever. Hence and success

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...could hardly found penicillin for ever. Hence and success
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, while, for example, by the way, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77163461538 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63538763097 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1318899963 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.473684211 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8947368421 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131309731549 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394491709822 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368555663039 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811465231771 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238545253815 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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