GRE sample issue pool essay topic 128
Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Choosing the field of study is a difficult decision for any student, be it a high school elective or a graduation degree. This choice could be a lot easier if the educational institute counsel the student first about all the fields uninterestedly. The prompt suggests that the institutions should guide the students towards those fields that have profitable careers. However, I mostly disagree with the prompt for following three reasons.
First of all, the field of study entirely depend upon the capacity, caliber and passion of the student. If someone wants to be involved in those field which he or she excel at or has immense desire, then they should be counselled to that field no matter the future of that particular subject. If it makes the person happy, then they should be encouraged to that path. Money and other success will come automatically if the person continues their job with a happy mindset.
For instance, Leonardo Da Vinci's father schooled him to be a political person like himself. The school tried teaching him those subjects that could have made him a great politician as the job at the side of the king was considered to a dream by everyone. But he never excelled in that part. Instead, Leo chose painting and engineering as his life's ambition due to his utmost love for that field. Now, we all know what he was able to achieve. So, encouraging any student against their passion could not benefit no matter how lucrative the job is.
Furthermore, careers are always temporary. What is lucrative today might be all lost in the near future. The world is highly volatile. Those who choose any field of study on the basis of the profitability of a career, might regret due to the changing nature of the world. Let's take this as an instance. Few years back, Nuclear scientists were a lot popular. There was race to become a nuclear scientist all over the world. The job was demanding and the governments of many countries too were interested. But, after the nuclear mess happened in Chernobyl, the job has faded away and now those students are struggling. Nowadays software is popular and no one knows how long will it be on the trend. So, choosing any study field by looking at the job prospect should not be encouraged most of the time.
However, there are a lot of students as well who are unsure about their desire. There are those who want to establish themselves financially in the world at any cost. For these students, the counselling of the educational institutions towards fruitful career path is definitely beneficial. For instance, Bollywood actor Akshay Kumar thought he wanted to be a martial artist. But he also wanted to earn a lot of money. He had no idea, no desire and no knowledge of acting whatsoever. But, the school where he studied, encouraged him to choose the field as it was ever growing and the respect he could get would be lifetime. He got tempted by this and choose acting as his major in his college. And now, he is one of the successful and highly paid actors all across the world. So, encouraging students to go towards the path of successful careers can be helpful too in many places.
This choice differs from person to person and cannot be generalized to all people by looking at some few cases. However, Educational institutes should first encourage students to choose their field of study according to their passion and then move towards the lucrative career.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'excels'.
Suggestion: excels
...involved in those field which he or she excel at or has immense desire, then they sho...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 310, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to paint'.
Suggestion: to paint
...celled in that part. Instead, Leo chose painting and engineering as his lifes ambition d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 273, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ue to the changing nature of the world. Lets take this as an instance. Few years bac...
^^^^
Line 8, column 658, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to act'.
Suggestion: to act
...time. He got tempted by this and choose acting as his major in his college. And now, h...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, then, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78282828283 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61490952362 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479797979798 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 881.1 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.2370786517 183% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7873601524 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7837837838 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0540540541 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.48648648649 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188514279287 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489672230534 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587334271805 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125181113772 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454587983609 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'excels'.
Suggestion: excels
...involved in those field which he or she excel at or has immense desire, then they sho...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 310, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to paint'.
Suggestion: to paint
...celled in that part. Instead, Leo chose painting and engineering as his lifes ambition d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 273, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ue to the changing nature of the world. Lets take this as an instance. Few years bac...
^^^^
Line 8, column 658, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to act'.
Suggestion: to act
...time. He got tempted by this and choose acting as his major in his college. And now, h...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, then, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78282828283 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61490952362 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479797979798 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 881.1 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.2370786517 183% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7873601524 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7837837838 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0540540541 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.48648648649 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188514279287 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489672230534 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587334271805 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125181113772 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454587983609 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.